This was beautifully written, even for smut XD

i like how you kept to their characters and how you forged their situations together.

brilliantly done :D

you should totally write one where Ayumu gets jealous in his own way over Hiyono and Hizumi XD

ah, you should also listen to the song "You are mine" by Mute Math.

keep it up! :3

Oh dear.

These three indeed. I think I spent two full minutes wondering where in the world this would land in the timeline/how it would fit into canon before a little voice in the back of my head screamed "STOP THINKING SO HARD AND ENJOY IT FOR THE LOVE OF CHRIST!"

So, well, um. I don't have much to say. My mouth has been hanging open for a while. I don't think I have an excuse to not write a certain fic (or five) now that you've done this. Not that it's related, but just saying. Smut inspires more smut, or something.

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF

YES

THIS

Dear Aza,

THIS WAS HOT.

KTHANXBAI,

CAL

Er, okay, more detail. I think I just went straight for Hiyono. I have no idea how you managed that, but I suddenly want to be Hizumi...WTF did you do to me? I like how it starts off with Hiyono and Hizumi, and then Ayumu joins in.

I love Ayumu's "I'm completely cool and in control and who's that girl?" attitude. What a delightful a-hole. :D

One bit of concrit. -shot-

"she closes her legs and firmly says "No"."

Should be:

says, "No."

That said...I would not object if you continued this. I AM SO GLAD SOMEONE ELSE UNDERSTANDS THE ONE-SIDED YET TWO-SIDED-NESS POTENTIAL OF THIS THREESOME

I think you captured it best when you said: "THESE THREE AARGH."

THANK YOU FOR SHARING

Now I'm going to end my terrible comment.