She’s been to his house already. She even went up to his room.

Damn it Bella! I get it she is 17 but for fuck’s sakes

I like happy

Excuse me, but Paul's last name is Lahote. How did you manage to mix that up with the last name of the actor who plays him in the movies? That's a serious mistake and a huge turnoff.

The way Paul treats Bella when they first meet isn't sexy at all. It's downright disgusting. Finding a man like that attractive, no matter his physical appearance, would never happen for Bella. I also don't see Paul being that much of a dick right off the bat like that. I also think it's lame that you gave Jacob a girlfriend just to make sure boundaries between him and Bella were clear. He's fifteen, it was unnecessary.

in this story nothing goes, bella is unbearable with a shitty temperament! paul can not be surprised by charlie because he would have heard him arrive before he was on his street and it is impossible that he does not know that edward is there, whispering will not prevent him from hearing as if he was right next to him with a loud voice

Beauty and the beast. Lol. Paul would joke that he’s the beauty.

She’s rather immature for someone who has been the mature one throughout her life. A guy is only going to take so much back and forth before he finally gives up.

With the Cullens leaving I wonder if that means Quil and the others won’t phase or if something else might cause it? Or maybe they’re too far along to stop it now

I usually don’t complain about fics. I take changes as they come because it’s fanfiction and people change things all the time, I know I do. But...Edward with more control than Carlisle? The man who spent 360 years perfecting his control so he could be a doctor surrounded by human blood everyday? I just can’t buy that one. Sorry. Also, idk if this came out and you just didn’t know yet but, Embry is Grey with black spots. There’s four wolves that could be considered brown. Jared (who it would have had to be in your fic since the other three hadn’t phased yet), Quil, and Collin and Brady who don’t phase until Eclipse. So idk if you just decided to change Embry’s color or what.

If she heard a howl it means they’re close! Please let Edward have heard James. He had to have, he has a ten miles radius of his gift. Let them get there in time. I hope Jared is ok. He’s the only brown wolf in the pack right now since it’s only the four guys so far.

I hope they get him before James gets her

Well their little warning is convenient isn’t it. Jasper should be the one to take care of them, he’s more than capable. But as this is a pack fic I know why it has to be the boys. I just hope they get James and Victoria before they get to Bella.

That wasn’t quite the scam I thought it would be but I did think Edward was up to something, and now that idiot put her in danger and he doesn’t even know it, not unless Alice sees and she may not since Bella is tied to a wolf. Damn.

Ok, why do I feel like Edward is setting her up? I mean, it’s weird that he just said all that, knows she’s supposed to not be his friend anymore, and then decides to invite her to spend time with not just him but his entire family? Idk, that just seems...weird to me.