This is so interesting! I really like it!

Wow.

That was amazing, you write exceptionally well and your imagery is wonderful. I loved how you style this and how Olivia found out about Peter almost unintenionally while trying to find answers about her trip back from the Other Side. The reveal itself was very well-written and I really liked the idea of a hornet's nest sparking to life in her mind.

Very, very nicely done :)

CP7

*jaw drops* OMG!

you're updating this right? right?

which Peter was it btw? Over Here's Peter or Over There's Peter?

PLEASE CONTINUE THIS! SO MANY QUESTIONS VERY FEW ANSWERS!

If you are still considering taking this further I encourage you to do so! The whole Peter/Olivia child-friendship could be very interesting!

*insert scream of delight here*

THIS IS SO GOOD! Continue?

Whoa.

I'm definitely going to need more of this one. You're off to a fantastic start!

OHMYGOD,

MORE MORE MORE!

loved this, it was fantastic :)

I really like this idea, you mentioned there was more? it would be a blast to read it :)

CONTINUE! PLEASE!

Wow, wow, wow! This was so good and interesting and you HAVE ( yes is an order) to continue. The StyleWriter was beautiful, all the emotions and the tape, the fact that ir was Peter playing chess with her. The ending just lets you wanting tons more-pretty please, continue :)

Keep going! I want to know what happens. Please. :)

This is really good. I'm not sure whether there was a twist wat the end of the chapter, but I am intrigued.

You intentionally made Peter older than Olivia for a reason.

I was totally rivited by the chess game.

This line really touched me. "It's OK, uncle Walter! I'll do it!"

Please continue.

Very nicely-written. This is interesting stuff and you had my attention.

I'm surprised you have only Olivia D. mentioned as the characters and not Olivia D. and Peter B.

If you feel like continuing it you should...

Oooooh I do hope there is more to this! Wow that was really good!