i was so close to finishing this bec i thought it’s something new and unproblematic in a way that no twific has ever been before. and that made me happy until this chapter. like seriously? you’re going to bring up confederacy? just like that? out of nowhere in this heavyhearted, slow burn ExB drama? you couldve left that out and still give us impact. i’m not even overreacting like what is it with the twifandom and being so obsessed with confederacy to the point that they can easily change that in FANFICTION where they can right smeyer’s flaws in the universe like they do with every other fucking AU but choose to KEEP confederacy in? anyway nice fic i guess that just bothered me because i was so invested but you had to add that in.

“indian name” ... yikes and for a fic updated in 2015 too

Do you mean "breathes" or "breaths"? You breathe when you take a breath. Just asking.

"I took a peak in the mirror..." Again, it's PEEK, not PEAK.

"...pealed at least four layers of esophageal lining away" Egad. It's PEELED.

"I peaked at Rosalie and Emmett..." It's PEEKED, not PEAKED. To PEEK means "to sneak a look;" a PEAK is the topmost part of something - like a mountaintop.

I am just loving this. And I very much hope she breaks her abstinence.

Thank you

Thank you! I hope your writing again somewhere. :)

Wow - your writing is poetry.

Oh, this is so good. I love them.

Thank you

Dunno what happened, but you are s wonderful writer.

Phew!

:)...