This is so sad, I wish you made it a bit longer though!

wow...that was wonderful

This is good! I did get a little confused when you didn't label the changes in POV (it'd be nice if you could write, for example Riza POV).

It's still very good though, and I really liked it. Keep up the great work!

It feels unfinished, but it is a very good piece.

I think this story is amazing i say continue it im reading :D and yeah its pretty wow,

Wow. Powerful and brought me to tears...and I will admit I don't even like Roy that much.

Whoa, that was some heavy stuff. w

But a really nice job. The two different perspectives really made this story great. It was a good way to convey the emotion within it.

Alot of people always seem to go very unrealistic/over the top when writing self harm/self hatred stories, so how you've wrote this one actually makes me feel like it could happen in real life. Just right. ;)

The only thing which I would say though, is perhaps make it a bit more clearer when the point of view changes. I think that writing 'Riza's POV' or Roy's POV' would ruin it, so try something like leaving a bigger gap between them. I don't know...I think something like that would just help is all. ;

Anyways, I had a lot more to say, but I stupidly logged in after typing out my review, so I lost it. ;-;

But really, this was a really great story. It's good to see that there's still some good non generic/well written Royai fics out there. :3

This is a very beautiful story. I really could understand how Roy and Riza were feeling by the way you wrote it. By the end of the story I was almost ready to cry.

Wow. I loved it.

I really liked how you switched perspectives between Roy and Riza. I felt like it kept the story moving and it kept me intrigued.

The way you wrote from Roy's POV really made me feel his pain and his anguish. I love that in Royai fics. So thank you for providing that.

And when Riza cried for everyone, I was a little shocked but grateful you included that. Usually I read fics where she would normally restrain her tears (and that's how I would have written it) but I really enjoyed her breaking down and how she left his side so he wouldn't have to see.

I really did enjoy reading this. Great work!