j'adore je veux la suite de the heart a devil

je la suite de le coeur d'un diable

C’mon when’s the next chapter, this story is getting good. Hope it’ll be soon, I want to read more

It is a good story keep it come.

I'm loving Tsubaki. She kicked Sasuke in the balls and sent him flying ten feet in the air! I can't stop frickin' laughing! XD

shut it emo

Love it. Keep updating I love narumiko

Continue also Vergil wont be needed as enemy they already have plenty of them he is better as ally Naruto should get some new katana when Vergil takes back Yamato

that was good keep the chapters coming

Please don't start a story with this line.

"Naruto was in his apartment"

I'm sorry, but that's a major turn off for me. One should set the scene first, explain what's going on, and the like. I find it best to lead with a single line, followed by a slightly longer one, THEN a pargraph of sorts. Again, avoid using "was, as, before, and then, as well as, who then, while" and the like

Starting a story with a pargraph is a big no-no in my book.

Again, I'm not trying to be a dick about this. I was very much in the same boat as you when I first began writing back in the 90's.

You've got potential, Red, I just want to see you unleash it to its fullest.

Regards,

~Nz

Please update this it’s amazing

This is great plz continue!

when is chapter five coming out its good

continues the story

Continue this story and please maket only mikoto x naruto