Really hot. Great little x-fic.

...BREATHLESS!

S'OKAY TO WRITE 2 VERSIONS OF A STORY WITH THESE TYPES OF SCENES IN ONE.

ER..YOU LEFT THIS OUT?

WTF's wrong with you?

I just wanted to say many thanks for Chap 1 and Chap 2. As a long time devotee of these 2 characters I enjoyed your handling of their "consummation"! Please Keep writing!

oft, loved this, very well written! Can't believe it's the first time you've written anything like this, well done :) x

Lol! I liked the ending.

Very well done.I may be a bit late to the game, but I think you did a wonderful job.I'm reading this after having already begun Prequels.I can't wait to see where you go from there. Please update soon!

I like your portrayal of their first time - hesitation and awkwardness ensure usually in such situations. Yours was quite tender and I felt that both are very much real characters from flesh and blood, not fictional.

First sex scenes (of any kind!] are always nerve wracking. You did well. This felt real. The set up was in keeping with the couple, Spock was knowledgeable but inexperienced and Nyota definitely set the pace although she was more passive in the proceedings. You had a good balance of ‘activity’ and emotion. Well done.

Sexy!

I did like it! I wouldn't have guessed it as your first sex scene! I love that you were not overly graphic - more the type of M story I look for! Keep posting!

You are really putting yourself out there asking people to tell you reasons why they might not have liked it, lol. I am usually too shy to read my reviews until after I've written my story. Bad reviews hurt my feelings. But anyway, I think you did a great job with the description. For me personally, I would have added some dialogue (hope that's spelled right) in there, maybe they should have said some of the things they were thinking. Other than that, looking forward to more M ratings!