I've lost track of how many times I've read this story. I hope you come back and finish it!

IWANTMOARNOW!

Pretty Please.

Damn, nice story please oh please come back and finish it! T-T

I discovered the story a few days ago and enjoy reading it very much. After reading one chapter a day, now I arrived here and I HAD to leave a comment. All of the story so far I really enjoyed, it's very cool. But just this made me fall of the chair:

Oghren sniggered salaciously and nudged Zevran in the ribs. "Eh heh, is that a dagger in your pocket or are ya just happy to see the Warden?"

I was very amused reading this and when it came to this quote I was like "OMG IT'S LORD FLASHHEART!".
Am I right? :D
Even though I would have rather expected this to come out of Zevrans mouth, but it's still hilarious.

I really like your story and will continue reading for sure. I am very curious where the story will lead. You're doing a really great job, it's funny and brings a lot of those simple aspects of the game really much to life.
And, next to all that, I think Loghain is adoreable. It is a great pleasure to read more about him and see people who like him.

Well then... I will continue reading now. Thank you for the great story!

This was really good. I really wish you would continue this.

Just reread this and hope that you finish it . Excellent story.

I love this story so much it's awesome, I love the awkwardness after the near kiss can't wait for update x

Well, this would be the third time I've read this chapter, and I enjoyed it just as much as the first! You already know how much I love it: I'm going to add a few thoughts that have come to me after some reflection...

Kal is being her usual generous self in her considering how the castigation over a relationship would be "so much worse for Loghain than for her". I see this in two ways: obviously a marriage would raise many eyebrows - but the sad truth is that if Loghain were to merely take her as a lover it would raise only a nudge and a wink. He wouldn't be the first Ferelden noble to indulge a taste for Elves (Maric!) and they would see her as no more than a plaything. I think the castigation would be worse for her: it would ruin her standing in the eyes of many, turning her from Warden Commander to plaything. Not to mention her own people would condemn her. Sadly, it's never the guy who loses out in this kind of situation :) I think this is an issue that is bound to rear its ugly head sooner or later.

It was quite poignant to see Zev have to stamp on his burgeoning feelings for Kal...and then revert to his old ways! :) Heehee at Zev and the "Halla Girl" - nice song choice btw. Can't get it out of my head :)

The little girl's POV was adorable: and the conversation between Kal and Sarel was telling. I enjoyed the imagery of the healing forest and it works as a metaphor for the land after the Blight. Kal's words: "changing, not dying - not all change is bad" were wise and so true. Both Dalish and City Elves can never go back to what they were...they can only survive and adapt - and that means changing. I wonder: will your Dalish accept the canon land grant of Ostagar? I have mixed feelings about this - it seems a bone thrown by the Ferelden ruler to keep them docile - and in the long run their Keepers will be in danger from the Chantry. But I can't see a better alternative. I do think that the war will increase Ferelden's reliance on the City Elves, pushing their influence up. Whoever becomes Bann will need to capitalise on that.

Re The Archdemon...what is Urthemiel up to indeed :) Can't wait!

"Two Elves and a Grump" - Bwahaha!

The celebration and dancing were vividly described and I really enjoyed the scene. From Zev's banter to Loghain's jaundiced memories...to Oghren! Aah - my eyes! And you realise we're now chomping at the bit to get to the point where Kal and Loghain DO dance together...

Excellent chapter - can't wait for the next one!

Well, I say you haven't lost your touch between then and now, for whatever that's worth. The characters are still consistent and interesting and, in some cases, lovable and whacky (namely Oghren). The little exchange between Zevran and Leliana was intriguing, because it shows that those two have concerns and desires outside what Kallian does and with whom she does it. It also shows that such desires may or may not be met, might make things awkward for more than the focal pair, and could go several different ways, which piques my interest. It shows you're thinking outside the main couple/would-be couple, and that's admirable, no matter where you take it. Adaia, as a side note, is suitably adorable and appropriate for how the others see her and what she does. It's that little ray of hope and sunshine in an otherwise grim and dark time, and that's pretty precious.

The lore and setting you're creating between the Dalish and the City Elves is quite interesting. The Dalish come across as distant and aloof in the game, but they're like that to everyone. That there are factions who feel that their City cousins might be welcomed back to the fold while others see them as outsiders and borderline traitors is a very interesting snippet that Bioware never really explores in detail, and it really adds to the depth of the people Kallian's dealing with and what sorts of challenges she's facing. I may have mentioned this in a previous comment, but if I didn't, then I should have, that it feels real, and you're doing an admirable job of not making her the person who solves everything or has special insight or is accepted because she can convince everyone to follow her. You mention that she didn't fight the possessed Templar in the Tower, that she failed to save Isolde because she was afraid, and so on. Kallian feels like a very real and flawed person, with all the good and bad that comes with it, and that's an accomplishment to be proud of.

Finally, Loghain and Kallian's relationship is wonderfully paced and detailed. They're acting like people would, and the way they're interpreting each other's actions and their own introspection is excellently done. I like Loghain's conflicting halves, showing the younger part of himself, probably sick of sacrificing and bleeding for causes, wanting Kallian for who she is, while the older part is logical, cold, and resolute. Which is precisely the sort of person the man at the Battle of Ostagar was. So well done there. Kallian's also very well portrayed in her youth and lively spirit, someone who doesn't like being snubbed or shot down (and really, who does?), and both parties wanting the same thing and coming to similar conclusions, namely the difference in age, race, and status and priorities, of why it shouldn't be able to work. And what's excellent about all those reasons, aside from them being logical and not dramatic or childish or hysterical, is that they're exactly the sorts of reasons people in that situation would come up with.

So I'm still enjoying the fic as much as I was before your absence. It's detailed, immersive, and very consistent. It's a real joy to read, and I'll gladly read every chapter that follows. Welcome back, and keep it up: you've got a dedicated fan here.

Vocarin

Good evening, folks. I removed my Chapter 12 "status update" and posted an actual, real chapter, which shows up in my preview but doesn't seem currently active yet. Despite the notification email going out. Vexing. If you don't see a real chapter, try back again in 30 minutes or so. If it's not up by tomorrow morning, I shall try again. :/

No amount of words seem adequate and I do not know your name other than that of your account but as my friend says "you'll be in my thoughts" (kinda like praying but different) I hope that didn't sound creepy, nothing I can think of to say sounds right so I'll say all of us who read and love this story are with you. Can't really explain how my mind sees it but I guess we're here as support. There is no substantial way we can help but we're here for you.

Thank you for taking your time to write this wonderful story. I hope you once again manage to return to it, though it would be completely understandable if you do not. I hope you keep writing, not necessarily this story but in some form. I've found its a good way to cope with emotions. While it wasn't as rough as your experience I did lose my dad when I was 18 and found that writing helped me deal with the pain. Sometimes you just need an outlet.

I know that "I'm sorry for your loss" can be rather frustratingly inadequate and your probably sick of hearing it but I really can't find a better to express my sympathy.

I hope things get better for you. As for the guilt. I suspect you will always feel somewhat guilty about it. Emotions like that rarely disappear completely, but don't blame yourself. All the signs might seem obvious now but that is often the case after the fact.

My dad died of a kidney failure. It was pretty much drug induced. Much like yourself I feel responsible for it. There were a lot of signs point to drug issues but I didn't want to see it. Right before his death I had convinced him to get help and he had enrolled in a program. It was too little to late. He died shortly afterward. I still think about what could have happened if I had taken action soon instead of ignoring the signs.

I don't know if it will help or even be appreciated, but if you feel the need to vent or just talk something out feel free to email me. I know that we don't know each other but sometimes it helps to be able to write to somebody not involved. You're also welcome to ignore this message or bitch to me about sticking my nose in what;s not my business. (Both would be completely understandable) But I felt the need to offer.

On a lighter note. This is one kick ass story and I love the way you write loghain. The first time I played through the game I hated him, but after I read the book about the stolen throne I changed my opinion. Now he is one of my fav characters. I'm glad that someone has given him a chance to shine. Now since this message has reach the point of being ridiculously long. I leave you with my best wishes.

I appreciate givng your readers an update, but this isn't the place to post your personal drama.

May time dull the pain but not the memory.

May your mother find peace she longed for.

May this tragedy tighten the bindings of your family to be as strong as possible.

May the talent of your writing immortalize the woman, the mother and the best friend lost to you.

i wish you luck for the future, i think you deserve some after all that grief