Nice story. I enjoyed seeing the softer compassionate side of B.A. I love that you have Murdock and Kelly married.

The relationship between Murdock and Kelly was very nicely portrayed. Great job. Is there going to be another chapter?

Love the story so far.

Aww _ this story is so sweet

I really like it. It could easily stand as a two-shot, but if eventually you want to add more that'd be pretty easy too :)

Really a very nice job, you're such an awesome writer :D IYD24

Loved it. Poor Murdock!

great line,and I agree Writer's block - when you have a story already started -sucks.

that would be a tough spot to be in. I feel for Kelly.

From the summmary I thought this might one of those Murdock/OC stories, but I'm so glad it's Kelly. :-) Loving the first chapter. Poor Kelly, and poor BA as well. I can't imagine what's going through their heads.

Please update soon.

I wanted to cry throughout this entire fic. Not because it was bad, but because it was good. I feel sorry for Kelly, I just want to hug her. This was really good. I enjoyed it. I hope Murdock is okay.

nice one! update soon

I couldn't really get into this story. I'm sure there should have been some emotional impact, but that just didn't reach me. I think it was because of all those -ing words. They make the narrative laboured. Try to use active voice in a story rather than passive voice. Active voice makes it easier for the reader to get "involved" in the story. Passive voice keeps them at a distance. Consider the sentences below:

* Her lips parting when she saw her husband lying in B.A.'s arms, her eyes welling up as she turned and ran back into the house.

- Her lips parted when she saw her husband lie in BA's arms. Her eyes welled up as she turned and ran back into the house.

Aww that was sweet _ I love Kelly.

Nice TV fic, it's pretty impressive to be able to write TV AND movie characters, that's not a very easy thing to do haha.

Hopefully get the second chapter up soon! Have a great weekend :) IYD24