Very good to be a first story, it is true that the characters did not behave like this in the game but that is because the developers focused on other things, for example Leon and Ada from Resident Evil 2 only met for a few hours and the situation made them take the right to have a "last" affection.

"Oh, and I totally am a girl. Like, totally."

And you are totally an idiot who can't write for s-h-I-t

Not very good, the characters really come across as dumb

I know right? They're so freaking adorable!
ANY OTHER CHAPTERS?!

Haha! This was cute, I giggled at the bandages thing. I just adore Henry/Eileen. x3

Goodness! How had I not seen this fic before! This was amazing and adorable at the same time, and very accurate I'd like to think. Buhh I love this couple and it's kind of surprisingly hard to find good stuff written about them, but hey, you get a gold star!

Keep up the good work!

~LabyDwell

Aw! I love Eileen and Henry. (Henry's the best looking Silent Hill Protagonist don't you think?) I wish that really would've happened in the game. /; This was wonderfully written. Great details!

Goodness...My first fanfiction of Silent Hill. I had to do it. xD

That was sweet :)

I have a bandage fetish too, XD

Beautiful...

Just beautiful... *-*

So this is what passes for "Romance" and a "Pairing" huh... it's so sad to see that since SH4 came out, only two people here at Fanfic Net have written these two characters correctly. They at least had the brains to not make Henry act like some pervert who just looks Eileen up and down and they didn't make Eileen act as if she was that "easy" for someone like Henry (who she just just met) to kiss. Nobody is in character here (because they didn't act like this at all in the game) and a Pairing of these two wouldn't happen until after the events of the game. People need to try and write about two characters falling for each other not in a matter of seconds, but over the cores many weeks and months in a long chapter story.

Okay, there are a few minor errors (waste instead of waist, etc) but I'm sure they're typos. That very minor critique out of the way:

This is very, very good. This is the first story you've posted on the site, and you should feel really proud of it. I feel like the present tense really adds something to the piece, unlike most stories that indulge in it. It makes the drama seem all the more immediate and the danger more present, less hiding in the background. Your characterization is spot-on; I love how sweetly awkward Henry is and how the relationship grows slowly. If this wasn't a oneshot, I'd encourage you to go back and continue this thread so we can see how they continue on, but in any case, this is a very strong done-in-one; it does exactly what it needs to do. It is very, very sweet and exceptionally well-written. Really good job!

"Pairing: HenryxEileen"

No, this is not a pairing... pairings are two people who are already together because they love each other. This is just "I find you good-looking, so lets kiss". There's no Romance in that

"He has to end this. He doesn't even know why"

Yes he does.. or.. yes he did. Walter is killing people and he's going to kill them both, of course he knew what to do.

"I bet Henry's mind wasn't always on survival, too. *wink*wink"

Someone makes up a scene like that... and you think it's true? Henry doesn't even come close to that in any scene. Talk about mass delusion... and only on a video game...

Ha! I KNEW you would end up writing a story. Now, I get to review yours.

This is very sweet. The present tense, short sentences, repetitions in structure is both creative and simple! I've never written in that style so I can't really say anything else.

Good fic. Haha, I bet Henry's mind wasn't always on survival, too. *wink*wink.