FYI Children of Elves and Humans are humans in Dragon Age, that’s why the elves try to only marry each other, oh and Alister’s mother is an Elf, mage, a Grey Warden and an Orlesien.

The old rope of « this is all just an extremely lucid dream where I remember perfectly what happens. Faces smell sound touch can do extremely well connected and précises movement as well as remember all that happened and still believe this to be a dream » has always annoyed me so much I wanted to physically punch all authors that ever used it and milked it for chapters believing it to be interesting and funny idea...

Intresting chapter mate though I had to read it twice. Though I had bit of a sore spot when the image of archdemon in his dragon form trying to woo the warden with some flower at the battle of the captial pop in my mind while I was in class at my college made me giggle so hard.

I freaking guessed what bambinoa meant and I was right lmao.

You might know this but I'm not sure that you do cause you made some serious misconceptions about sex when it comes to a woman.
1. There is no barrier if there is please contact a physcian.
2. The muscles in the vigina do not get looser with more sex you have.
3. If the muscles in the vigina are still tight increase the amount of foreplay. Foreplay helps to relax the muscles and to lubricant the insides.

Besides all that this an interesting story so far.

I don't dislike the premise, but the actions/reactions of Lucy/Elissa are rather odd. They read as somewhat strained and flat. Perhaps it is because of how lighthearted the scene is in contrast to how dire the situation is, but it is extraordinarily hard to maintain my suspension of disbelief. It might be worthwhile to give these first few chapters another look to see if maybe some edits would be appropriate.

Alright so here it is. I literally just found your story, read this first chapter and the message directed to readers of more innocent natures and I've got to say...I seriously cannot wait to read more. The humor so far is there and honestly, as a woman I will admit that my thoughts have found themselves in the gutter often. I'm almost positive they were born there sometimes. But anyways, Lucy's reaction to this was great so far. She thinks it's a dream and so her mouth and brain are just like "fuck it" but I cannot wait to see what happens when she realizes it's not what she thinks.

I really felt I should review every chapter but I just don't have the time these days. I ended up not reading at all, simply because I felt I didn't have time to comment. In the end I caved in and simply devoured the story, and enjoyed it thoroughly.

Initially I was afraid Lucy would turn out a bit of a Mary Sue but that fear was dispelled fairly quickly. I loved to read about her struggles with Thedas politics and all those annoying social rules that everybody seems to automatically know except you. I loved even more the fact that she would grow unfit when she didn't train. That she needed constant training to hone her skills. It's one of these obvious things that always is bizarrely overlooked in this kind of stories.

I had lots of fun finding all the Monty Python references, including the more obscure one from A Fish Called Wanda. I half expected Eamon to die from a heart attack at the end.

If I have any complaint, and it's a rather minor one, it's this reference to the side quests that works so well in the game but gets annoyingly in the way of the story when you try to write them. So why refer to them at all? Writers seems to feel the need to mention them in passing, like 'and on our way to Redcliffe we had to help a little old lady to find her cat and collect 15 herbs for a herbalist', when in fact they should be written out entirely, as if they never existed.

Oh, and you went and killed off Riordan. Waaaah! I will try to forgive and forget.

These minor things aside it was a great read. I was so chuffed when Lucy realised introducing toilets would cause all sorts of environmental problems. Loghain beginning to see her as a weapon was so, well, Loghain, and had a terrifying logic to it. A nice touch. In fact, there were a lot of nice touches everywhere in the story making it a great read.

Thank you for sharing it with us.

I would fall to my knees in worship of my injury allowed for such. It is a rare event that I put aside a book for a fan work, and before finding this I had am excellent book indeed. Needless to say, I found your work entrancing, a true mastery of language.

Alright, I may be laying it on a bit thick there. But I certainly did enjoy it. You'll have to forgive me for not leaving a comment more often. I was too eager to reach the next point of the story for such niceties. I know it is an awful weakness and sometimes incredibly rude.

-blinks- Holy shit! I actually didn't cry! Someone died in a story and I didn't cry! It was even someone I liked!

Sadly, it was probably because I was still pretty sure that's what would happen.

So as I sit here twiddling my thumbs and realizing that both Anora and Lucy have Grey Warden babies... I find myself kind of wanting a oneshot of Lucy actually ending up with Urthemial...

You are killing me, my dearest authoress. Tearing my heart and making me wither and writhe. It has taken me more than a week to read through what usually takes but a day to read.

Between the blushing and the laughter, I feared I'd never get through.

I know the sequel is out, but I'm hoping for some polyandry.

YEA! GIT IT, LUCY!

Huh, this was a pretty good story. I wasn't a big fan of all the sex but it was well-written with only the odd spelling mistake here and there. This story gets a favourite.

"Feeling the body I'd grown so accustomed to since Orzammar" should be "Feeling the body I'd grown so accustomed to since Ostagar".