You have a great idea but your writing really suffers and it makes it difficult to read.

Okay first impressions. Story idea is a good one and the writing isn't half bad. You use ! too readily and there is no use putting thoughts in "" as that is for speech. Better to put thoughts in italics.

Other than that and a few other minor mistakes this was a good read. Now where will you take it.

I like idea behind it what made him go from this point to abuse of his wife i mean yeah he was a little unhinged a few chapters back but in the beginning chapters he seemed to be just insane in the brain like he really almost hates her so I'm a little lost there is that something that your going to address later or maybe it wasn't clear to me?

The only real problem I have with this fanfic is when it changes time periods. They just weren't clear when they changed, so it just left me confused. I had to read this story about three times before I could truly understand what was going on, but other than that it has been definitely one of my favorite fanfictions I've ever read.

PLEASE UPDATE!

After a nearly 10 year hiatus could we please have a update?

I'm utterly hooked.

I've read 78 chapters knowing I'll gasp for air and just sigh... If you're well and good please have mercy and continue writing

all super awesome unti they went on vacation!

You should organize it

thisis shit

There's no link on your profile to send you a PM, but I wish I could! If you don't have the motivation to finish this story, then I would finish it for you because this is just a cruel way to end it! The fanfiction world needs you. Please contact me if you're still active and see this!

Wish I could keep reading this, but I'm exhausted so I'll finish in the morning! It's so upsetting that this hasn't been updated in 8 years. You seemed to put so much effort into it over the course of 5 years, so why abandon it? You're talented and have readers counting on you. Even if you have a life with an important job or kids now or something, you don't have to be embarrassed to write things on here still. I'm following, keeping the hope that there will be more!

I hate this cliffy. Please do something about it.

This is by far the best fanfic I've ever read.

I can't get into this. The words that are *****out, acronyms such as btw in speech, it's distracting. I think you have a lovely idea here, but it needs some tuning.

OMG! CONTINUE!