This is stupid.

Great story I really liked it a shame that you gave up on it.

Good story.

Please include "non-human" Harry in story description, it would have helped me to avoid it. Nothing good or bad to say about the story just not what I came to read.

Just read this story straight through not bad but the devil drama got real old real fast how long are we going to have to deal with him not being in control of his body and now that we have moved away from the Elves I find myself not really caring what happens in the story it just ended so poorly with the elves I would really have liked to see them come together not fall apart in the end there's just so much drama and angst in this story it's depressing I hope it gets a little lighter and that you come back to this story

I have a hard time reading this or liking it. It's all dark this, death, evil, blah blah blah. I don't particularly like Harry. He's and ignorant, emotionless, arrogant ass in my eyes. The story would have been a hell of a lot better if you made him a little more empathetic to readers.

I find myself rooting against him, which really shouldn't happen to the main character of a story..

Good story, however, not going to keep reading as, don't like being depressed or feeling that reading a story has been a waste. This would happen if after reading over 72,407 words, the main pairing ends up ruined, and as this would only happen if H or T died or H and T broke up, there are, after all, no, as the authers note said 'guarantees that Harry and Tonks will be together at the end of this story' just
that it's H an T pairing 'whether it ends well or not'. This simply is not worth the read. Though as stated before
story is quite Good.

His lack of control and sole desire for revenge still leads me to believe that Harry lacks the mental faculties to understand that he's a few fries short of a happy meal. Your descriptions are good in this chapter, but still far too long and unnecessary. Also, the entire first half of this chapter was unneeded and entirely useless. I understand the conflict you keep trying to force on him, but you're overdoing it and making this seems like an angst story. I think you have to much on your plate, and you should probably try and settle down. Don't misunderstand me, I like this story, I just feel the need to inform you of your mistakes so they don't destroy this story. Good day to you.

- Thorndsword

Come on now, are you serious? Harry has zero self control, therefore he isn't even suited for battle. I see what you're trying to do here, but you're failing so hard at it that it's laughable.

- Thorndsword

You describe things far too much, and I end up simply skipping whole paragraphs of useless information. Also, Harry's inability to control his own actions is extremely foolish, considering how much you say he hates weakness. His focus on killing Voldemort is absurd, because the reason stated was nowhere near adequate. We have six chapters here, and only one of them really moved the plot forward. Having harry dark is fine, but him being stupid about it, makes this hard to read. You writing is good, it's just that you seem to be focusing on the wrong things.

- Thorndsword

I hope to hell that harry grows a backbone, because his willingness to obey is nauseating. And still there's no magic, I don't understand what you're doing, because your plot hasn't gone anywhere in a few chapters.

- Thorndsword

The thing that bothers me is the rivalry between Harry and Sylmae. Trust me when I say that such a plot device never works the way that it's intended. Also, as this is a harry potter story, him not yet learning magic is a a bit annoying. Other than those things, this is a fairly good story so far.

- Thorndsword

I don't like harry's initial reluctance, but I do concede that it's understandable under the circumstances.
Thanks for the read, and I hope for many more.

- Thorndsword

This is much better than the first chapter, but harry still seems a bit on the dull side. What I mean is that his analytical skills are a bit lacking. Other than that, it's quite exciting, and I look forward to reading more.

- Thorndsword

No offense, but your harry is quite stupid. He thinks he can't leave, when nothing is stopping him. He takes abuse, when he could just slit their throats at night and then leave. That is the problem, he doesn't think. The way you write him, it's like he's an angst machine.

- Thorndsword