that was really interesting, thanks for the read!

:") beautiful! When I read that he was to be sentenced to death I was so tempted to scream and run around in circles! But because joey was so happy afterwards I figured it was best. I in my fanfiction, I am going to have really tradgic events. I don't think it could be nearly as good as yours though!

Wow. This was beautifully executed, no pun intended. It felt hollow, but not unsatisfying. I loved the buildup, you set it up just right. Kudos to you!

...Fucking hell. PLEAD INSANITY! Just jump up and say that you plead insanity, because obviously, if you don't remember murdering him, then you must be crazy! Have that freaking mental breakdown again!

Woah. Incredible breakdown scene. And then the description of Jou's thought was amazing. If all else fails he should plead insanity.

The concept is intruiging and original. However, the story itself isn't what interests me very much. The plot and such is good, and I'm sure that this is really great for fans ofmurder novels and such. What I'm realy interested in is the end. How will this end up? Will Jou live or not, and either way, how will you pull it off? Will it be unexpected yet satisfying, like Farenheit 451? Or willit leave me feeling dazed, somewhat empty, like Old Yeller or Bridge to Terebithia? In regards to suspense, there's enough to keep me reading, but not so much as to be unbearable. Good job so far.

I'm liking where this is going. Poor, poor Jou...

The story is very interesting. I could emotionally connect to all the characters. There are some grammar errors and weird sentences but it didnt effect the general plot.

LexJay

I loved this story you can tell that you put your emotions into it although I wish the bad guys went to jail but I think that Joey being blamed made it more interesting

OMG. I was perfectly fine reading this last chapter u until Seto said "I love you." After I read that, I suddenly burst into tears.

I literally went from one second fine, the next sobbing my heart out. And I still haven't recovered.

Very good job. This was really well-written and I loved every moment of it. You're very talented. Don't stop writing.

~Aria

Of there are no lemons...

...how will I make lemonade? D:

~Aria

Handful of thing

Good!

1. Emotionally touching, I cried, a lot.

2. INteresting, you keep hoping you'll pull something out and Jou wont die, but he does! Kept me reading all the way to 2 in the morning.

3. SSSAAAADDDDD! Wait, did I say that, and way SAD!

Bad!

1. they are both dead!

2. SAD!

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4.!

I'm crying, I seriously can't swollow this lump in my throat. Jou was killed for no reason! I loved it but it was so sad! But if this is ment to be a non-magic-apart-for-seeing-goasts FF then it made sence that he had to die so he could be with the one he loved. Bribing the witnesses is compleatly immoral and so is killing a total hotty like Seto. My sister thinks I'm a total wuss and I think she's just being a jerk. I blame you if I have depressing nightmares tonight cuz it's 11:04pm right now...Poor Jou. And now you have me thinking of a new FF where someone is dying of lung cancer...Thanks alot...Baka. I love the story all the same but I didn't like how the real killers walked away freely and I don't think Jou's friends would sit by and let him die, I know I wouldn't be able to. I liked the way your legal system works and to tell the truth, I watch too many crime shows and I think it looked alright. Yes the electric chair is a little old school but you wanted the dramatic efect and it worked and they still use it but not very often, most have death by injection, I think...anyway...I hope the real murderers and rot when they die! Anyway, I've draged this on long enough so, later and I want to read more of your stuff later but I think I'll wait a while cuz it takes me a while to get over semihappy endings that bring me to tears.

With admiration,

Raven Black.

YOU MADE ME CRY YOU BASTARD ;A;

I honestly cried, I thought it would end well somehow but it didn't and I just... ;_;

It was a really good story, though. (I read it all in a couple of hours just now, hehe.) You said somewhere in the beginning that it was cliché, but I don't think it's like anything I've read before... Which isn't really saying that much since I write a hella lot and read like, nothing, and-

Look just, I LOVED IT, OKAY? Okay.

I really liked it whenever they kissed too

Annie-chan, they all get away huh? Gosh its maddening to know Jou died in the end without reason but then its still exciting to know he got something in return as well…

I always did like sad, happy endings.