more pls more

I have just one comment. In this chapter, you said that it's from Iggy's point of view. He is blind, but you mentioned things that can only be perceived visually. Other than that, great.

Person (Anyone, good or bad): I believe introductions are an order. I'm (Name)
Max: Hi (Name,) I'm Maximum. All-natural, 100% Mutated Test-tube-born, Avian-American. Now, I suggest you leave, before I split your head open like a Flyboy.

This is a great story, I hope you continue to update it, I can't wait to see how it ends

Don't stop there! Update, Updte, Update, please!

Name ideas:
Jura
Hírador
Fundor
Galzra
Briam
Ohen
Gretiem
Beroan
Roslarb
(Those are from book the next ones I made up)
Elena
Daren
Sakiah
Saraziah
Salantra
Maraza
Linian
Berania
Relekona
Veran

Truefuly I like the names you already use better. I think you should keep them. I love your plot line too and think its amazing but I'm kinda scared about wheather your gonna add keepbwriting
Yours truly
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Good story:) my only suggestion is that Eragon and Saphira should not be taken down that easily... They have much more experience in their own environment... No offense.

This story is great continue it! I like the names keep them the same. I wouldn't be able to pronounce Saphira's name if I hadn't seen the movie. The ancheint names work because people can't understand the laungage dragon riders use for spells any way! In short unless you read the book you don't under stand the dragon riders langage any way. Please keep the names the same. just tell the readers what each name means. I also feel like I'm in the story if the names stay the same.

quite a nice story, though the use of "text talk" kinda takes away from the story. update soon!

wah! cliffhanger! more soon plz!

plz update! i luv this!

Nice story, but you need to work on your grammar. Also, I'm probably being biased, but I don't think Eragon would be defeated so easily. Remember the words of death?

Telur. Gazzy's dragon. ;D

You should update this. A story this good should never go to waste. Aside from what seems to be random word substitutions, you've got a good thing going here, and I want to see more of it.

I really like it and I love that u gave the flock dragons keep wrighting!