That was so sad i think i'm crying poor mimi and also poor matt T-T :(

Omg this story is so damn touching '(

i cried at the ending...

mimi was always my favorite character.

D;

Oh noooos! I have a feeling that Mimi's-! Mío in camt day just yet until the last chapter. Post the last chapter ASAP

oh wow, i wanna knw wht' gonna happen w/ meems. i do luv her character despite i'm a guy xP lmao. i hope that she chooses the guy tht i think she chose. we'll see. keep at it! i can't wait to read your prequel when this is over!

Oh no, i hope that you don't...ya know..kill Mimi in this story! D she's tooo precious! she needs Matt! lol But keep going becoz i love it!

these past chapters have been sooo good! like all the relationships and the steamy moments were perfect. loved the office scene with Tai and Mimi and of course the whip cream kitchen scene between Matt and Mimi haha. Mimis illness is so so sad though! i love how fast you have been updating. keep it up D

oh,that was so sad:((i think mimi has cancer or something,it will be so sad if she doesn't make it:((

Good chp! I cnt believe mimi and matt!

Tht wuz gud! I did luv da tention b/w Meems and Matt ;D maybe I should get da the whip cream out nxt time!

Red Foremen in Japan! Niiice. Keep goin'.

Wooo! Tai's got it goooood with Mimi! xD too bad this is a Mimato! D';

Great story! I realli like it! Im really curious to see wat Mimi has! Plz update soon!

To be honest, you have an interesting story. The plot is interesting, and I'm curious about what happened to Mimi.

There are a few things that bug me about your story, however.

1. The characters, including Mimi are OOC. Maybe this is just my personal peeve, but taking a character who already has a set personality and completely changing it... you'd be better off just making the story original instead of calling them names from an anime and calling the story a fanfic.

2. Your grammar. You have run-on sentences one after the other. I don't know how old you are, if you're in highschool or what, but you must have taken English class at some point. Know that you should use commas and semi-colons more often than you do. A tip that I was told and has always worked for me is to read your story aloud. If the sentence is longer than your breath can withstand, the sentence is too long. Breaks and pauses in your reading should be either commas or periods.

It's also a little annoying when you break your writing with little bits of your own speech. An example would be this.

"no JK my friend, they were so physically with one another and when I mean physical I mean chair throwing, kicking and..."

I? I honestly thought you were switching from third person to first person mid paragraph. And it doesn't look good to write "txt tlk" in your stories either.

Furthermore, I would like to see more emotion from Mimi when it comes to Matt and Sora being in the home. Instead of telling us she's mad by saying 'you wouldn't like Mimi when she says your full name' show it to us with her actions. Slamming the door in their faces? Perfect. I liked that a lot.

Why was Mimi smiling all of a sudden when talking with Matt and Sora? Didn't she hate them? You never told us that maybe she was pretending to have a civil conversation. You actually made it seem like she genuinely liked it. Maybe she was clenching her fist under the table? Gritting her teeth when she wasn't the one speaking? When I first read that part, I was confused. I thought maybe you forgot that she hated them.

Enough of my drabble though. I look forward to seeing the next chapter. And I hope you take my advice to help yourself improve.

this was very good! so so cute haha. i wonder whats wrong with mimi...well i hope we get to see more of her and tai even if its a mimato story which is still cute! haha.