Not bad for a first fic but you really need to make some spaces between paragraphs.

The 2nd Crysis FanFiction uploaded here at huh. Interesting...! How FanFiction is about to get more Crysis FanFiction stories.

Ouch that's gonna leave the bottom line for Nomad! That's going hurt his reputation. Unexpected ending I suppose so...

I'll give this a 7/10. Good job on this story the way you describe it by the action fighting scenes, the characters like Nomad, Nomad rocks! For each new paragraph I think you should space them so it will be easy for us to read.

Strickland is a major in the game, not a colonel.

Great story. The review's a bit late, but still. I'm surprised I'm the first. I'd like to point out that this is a great mission to write a fanfic on- there were so many different methods to use! Your writing is great, your inner monologue is perfect, and the action is amazing. Great story, I'll be checking out your channel for more.