Awesome! I love this idea, it's so completely original. I know you said that TwistedRocketPower has a story called "Alone" that is similar to this one, but I haven't seen it. Did he/she delete that story?

Anyway, I really can't wait to see how you piece everything together with Cody, Woody, Bailey, London, and Zack going to Seven Seas High, so please update soon.

wow... that was incredible. I never imagined anything like that, with the seperate twins, other than that one episode, but whoah.

I was crying almost in ch 11 :(

This is awesome

Very good. It's amazing how different Zack's life is. I mean, Kurt as a psychiatrist? I find that hard to picture. And Zack is a completely altered person too; he's more like Cody than himself...or, who he knows himself to be. This story presents an immensely intriguing concept: how much of who we are is determined by our environment (by our upbringing)? How much is determined by our nature? And what, above all else, constitutes reality?

I only had two problems with this chapter. One was the phrase "stronger-than-American liquid." I don't think "liquid" was the right word. Alcohol, perhaps. Or drink. "Liquid" looks as though you didn't know what other word to use, so you just opted for one that seemed to fit. I don't know if you did or not, but that's how it appears. I used to grapple with words all the time, but have since come to realize that doing so is not usually wise. The second problem I had was with long, detailed thoughts in italics. As you know, I'm extremely guilty of adding those. But after some revision of my work, I've started to dislike them. They're a cheap way to get into a character's head and most of the time feel unrealistic. There's nothing wrong with adding in italicized thoughts, but you should use them sparingly and they should be pretty brief.

Other than those two minor things, I loved this chapter. You've got a lot of talent.

Again, I love how you approach the story, leaving us to connect all the dots. Carey and Kurt have had one less mouth to feed in this reality, and have been able to combine their income. Plus, I'm pretty sure they've had more success in their careers. It makes me think of how different our lives could be if only we were dealt different cards, given different choices, and reared in different environments. It seems Zack has what he's always wanted - the "sweet" life. But...does he really? Is this reality any better than the one he remembers, or is it just...different?

"Carey was mother to a boy that didn't exist anymore, and Zack was the son of a mother who never existed." - Brilliant line!

As to be expected, the plot thickens! I love how you dive right in, building the suspense, offering no answers but giving subtle hints that something is off kilter. Zack's first memory is of unleashing the Drew Crew in the Tipton, which happened when he and Cody were in the sixth grade. Usually people have earlier memories unless they experience amnesia. Also, Zack recognizes his parents but believes they're divorced, even though he has no actual recollection of the divorce itself (since it happened before he was in the sixth grade). Interesting, very interesting.

You've still got some awkward dialogue. Nothing too glaring, but something to be mindful of. Remember, for future reference, that you want it to sound as natural as possible. Dialogue is one instance where it is okay - even encouraged - to tamper with politcal correctness and grammatical rules.

The prose is very good; however, there were two sentences that utterly bothered me. One was: "Their sense of urgency and concern flooded off them and almost knocked Zack over," which I think could have been simplified to something like "Their sense of urgency and concern almost knocked Zack over." The second was: "Years and years of raising a child and instilling in him common sense and tact had been wasted." You don't need it, as it's implied.

Nice second chapter! The way you construct a story is truly amazing.

As a sidenote: I just realized that I somehow managed to type "yerribly" instead of "terrible." God knows how, but anyway...sorry about that. :P

A promising beginning (I feel compelled to say that even though I've read it before). This reads like a prologue - the hook that grabs your audience and gets them pumped to continue. The drastic change from "just another night on the SS Tipton" to waking up in a hospital adds a strong sense of mystery and suspense that you executed really well.

I must add a small criticism about the dialogue, however - or more specifically, about the part when Zack and Cody say they love each other. It feels corny. You start out with realistic lines like "Man, I'm tired" and "You need to live a little," and then all of the sudden do a 180-degree flip into the sentimental. I get that Cody is emotional, but I don't think he'd tell Zack he loves him right after a conversation about watching movies. It's awkward. And even more awkward is Zack responding in the same fashion. With boys, as I'm sure you can attest, feelings are often beneath the surface of dialogue. So saying something like "Goodnight, man" - which I think would be more appropriate here - could mean "I love you."

I understand what you were trying to do - establish Zack and Cody's bond before diving into the main part of your story. Which is a good thing, don't get me wrong. But I feel that, in this case, you could have established it in a more realistic way.

Still, good work! ;)

I'm not even going to bother apologizing for my inexcusably late reviews. I'm just god-awfully yerribly when it comes to reviewing in general. :P

If it means anything, though, this will be my second reading of this story...and I practically never read fanfiction stories twice, so feel special. ;)

Wow. This story is amazing! You are an excellent author, and your writing style is intriguing. I loved Zack in this. Everything was perfect, you got the emotions for everybody spot-on. I found the dream sequence extremely interesting... Is this story complete now? Or is there more to come?

Great Work! _

Hi. Will this be continueing, because it is actually quite inviting, i was skeptical the first few chapters, but near the end when everything was slotting into place it wasn't such a bad read, as i said i would love to know if there will be more but if not, its ok i can leave the rest to the imagination.

Its pretty good! More!

I have read Alone and I liked it but I wasn't satisfied of the ending. This story just filled the gap with some twist in it.

Normal reaction by ticked off wife on idiot husband. I feel pity for Cody considering Kurt walked out on him. Cody's words made me believe there's tons of potential for a relationship. You showed Cody's emotions with thought. Its uncommon for kids in that position to feel betrayed. This could turn Cody down a dark path if he's not careful.

The Marion moseby that we knew is starting to show up. At least he realizes he made a mistake and trying to find a new life. So we finally go we could possibily meet the rest of the gang. I wonder how this will turn.

So it seems like eveyhing is turning to be true. At least Zack hopefully is comfortable with how it turns out. I love how we found out about Cody's past. Something is better than nothing. So it seems like you add Kurt's rocker lifestyle to his character in the story. I wonder if he has any regrets. What about Carey? i wonder how much else has changed in this world.

The vividness of the chapter is amazing with its confusing elements. Its probably part of his subconsciousness trying to get through to him. At zack realizes his feelings for everyone. You have to wonder what your mind looks from the inside. Creepy, but thrilling. We leave other dreams behind when we decide to focus on just one in life. I love the ending. I cant wait to read the next chapter.

The chapter full of lyrics facinates and scares me. Adam's song makes it seem like Zack might try to commit suicide again.

The second one makes it seem like the story is culmination of all of Zack fears in life.

The third makes it seem like Zack is asking for forgiveness for his actions and understanding in the difficult situation he was in.

The last one has signs of hope and fear considering this question: Why has he died and what made smile? Its obvious the person's in a mental institution. Is this a sign of things to come?