Well, this is certainly one of the most intense chapter's you've written thus far ._o

The violence depicted was quite well done, alongside the whole idea of Soul's soul (and the quite-tormenting parts towards the end about his soul's loss) were nicely done.

Like I said before, I'll say it again: you do have the ability to create whole new worlds and characters, and develop them to so much detail.

Keep it up! XD

hawk

Interesting way of putting in Cause and Effect.

Although, there are a couple of too-long sentences which start to become confusing, especially at the start of the fic proper. So it sometimes gets a little confusing to read - but maybe it's just me.

AWOL means "absent without a license" - so I'm not sure if it actually fits. Either that, or my fuzzy brain's acting up again *sigh*

Still, nicely done. *nods* Can't wait to see what happens from here on, heh - poor confused Wil!

Good luck with the other chapters! -

hawk

... Why do i get that strange feeling like some of these comments are aimed at me?...

But yeah, I mean you have such a large lineage of Lucarios, don't you think its awkward to skip generations and give a slice of life. There are a lot of names of people I just don't know of context. Gotta describe them! as mundane as that is...

But if you want a good theme, why don't you do teenage delinquency and juvenile acts? Surely you must have one character with a bottle of spray paint or a sling shot or something. What the kids do nowadays. A lot of your stories and themes are usually heavy and serious, how about something light-hearted to reveal some of the characterization in your characters? Take for example, the characterization of Snake from brawl. Depending on how you characterize him, he can be cold, bad ass, or just straight funny. Not every character has to be a serious leader of a tribe aimed at a boring existence of fighting. The first theme you did was good. It wasn't all that serious.

Mikage gets overly worked up sometimes, no? -

Finally *claps* a storyline involving all your generations... Interesting to see how this will turn out eventually, hm?

hawk