This is soo sad...

Cool

This was really amazing, even though I usually don't like reading about Natalie. I am so glad I chose to read this.
Nah, you're not the only one who understands this. By the end, I realized that you were switching between past and present, and the girl was Natalie's daughter. Though it's really sad.

Awesome! At first...I didn't get that it was her daughter...but then the last sentence...yeah. Everything made sense. Great story!

Really like the style here.

This was bittersweet and beautiful. *claps* I loved it. There needs to be more stories like this one.

~musiclover3

Yeah, on a reviewing spree again! Haha. ;)

Again, I this, Amy. So much. It's just... wow. I mean, I love the idea behind it. Extremely creative. And I just adored how you kept flashing back and forth between the two - past and present. Added something really special.

There were grammar errors - more so than usual - but obviously you know what you're doing, as this was quite a while ago, so I'll spare you everything. :)

"dark haired lady"

"dark haired goddess" Hyphens here.

"to plain" Wrong "to."

work place One word.

"She started walking off, leaving him to hurry behind her to catch up." Ah, this was just worded weirdly. Rearrange the end a bit, and it should be fine. :)

"She expects this, and taps" No comma needed here as they are not independent clauses. You used to do this a lot, but lately you've stopped, which is no surprise, as your grammar quality has definitely skyrocketed. :D

"she saw familiar blonde hair make its way towards her." Sounds odd to me. I'd say "familiar blonde head."

"She pursed her lips at him impatiently." I don't think you purse your lips /at/ someone.

Anyway, there were some more commas missing, a few awkward sentences, but I'll spare you. Obviously, you've got a better graps on grammar and whatnot than you did however many months ago this was written.

There could have been a bit more substance in paragraphs, but I really did enjoy how basically all of the sentences were short and to the point. 'Twas very, very nice. :D

And again, switch between past and present was extremely enjoyable. :)

Emotion was great, the sentences had power - just overall, it was fantastic. :)

Great job, Amy. I love these kinds of stories. :)

You are gifted! I Love YOur Writing!

that was...intresting, I liked it but ummm... in some parts I didn't get like I said before I liked it, it had deeeeep thought put into it. If you didn't put the author's note I would have never had guess the women in the begginging was Natalie's daughter or that the old man was Samuel.(I kinda thought that the women in the begginging was Natalie *looks down*). This story is like no others that involve Natalie.

Really deep. That's why I like your stories. Instead of the shallow, obsessed ones fangirls have, you have a reason to write. There is something there in your stories. I can see success in you as a writer someday. -B.R.

This was a beautifully written work of art that loved reading. Natalie was perfectly in character and her and Samuel's story gave me tears in my eyes. The flashbacks were touching and the story was heartbreaking. Thank you for writing this lovely piece.

that wuz sweet!

i so dont understand this story

Awww . . . Natalie deserves true love. Everyone does.

~~*Little Lobster*~~

Well, I'm impressed. See what a little editing can do? :P There was one sentence that you botched up, but that was the only one I really caught.

Anyways, I really did enjoy this. However... It just seemed to lack a bit of substance. Most every paragraph was just a couple sentences, three or four at the most. It looked a little empty, and I just wish there was a little more.

However, I thought the tale was still beautifully spun, and very well constructed. I was anxious the whole time to see how both story lines played out- and of course, you left a little surprise at the end. ;)

I wish I could write so poetically.