Wow! Seriously, I never would have interpreted the story like this, but it really does fit. This poor girl receding into her own mind where its safe, it kind of makes sense since you see her bedroom decorated with little details from the labyrinth, things that she would focus on while trying not to think. Fantastic, but utterly depressing.

This is brilliant. First off, just because it's so nice to see an original idea. Second, because all the pieces fit together so well.

And it doesn't need a continuation.

It's perfect just as it is.

Oh I really like it great job.

How can you do that? What sort of wretched human are you! My God, how can you NOT have more chapters up! LoL. Wow... I want to know more about what's going on with Sarah, where Jareth is, and where you wanna take this. So please update soon! You're on my list.

-R.A.-

Ai. that was great. and ya know, i really wouldn't reject a sequel...

It sounds to me like, there should be another chapter, something that frees her from her pain. Maybe Jareth does show up and save her. But there needs to be more. I want to read more!

Wow...interesting interpretation...very well written...but you should continue it!

Wow. That was really great! It's sad about Sarah and all but I really liked it your a good writer. You know I've never read anything like that before, the part about Sarah's Dad being, you know, it was very weird coz I'd of never imagined her dad to do anything like that.

Very good and yes I think you should leave it as that it explains everything I need to know anyway.

~Marianela~

shit, that was very interesting. i have never seen that side of this movie, then if it's not in the movies at all. This story invokes a lot of thought. She can't win in real life against the goblin King so she makes it up. It so sad that things like that happen in real life, I'm glad she found a way to win. thank for writting this I'm very glad I stopped to read this piece.

Wow - okay... you were definitely right when you mention "dark". And I see many other reviewers agree with me. heh - Well, despite what others might think, I believe this is perfect as a stand alone story. It ends very nicely and makes sense. I understand that your view for this story was that the story of the movie "Labyrinth" was completely make-believe and this story is your explanation of why. Interesting thoughts. In any case, good job. You're very good.

good job although quite sad definitely no fairytale it happens be in denial all you want but someday the truth will bite you

Boy do you have a dark streak. . .and I thought *I* was bearing bad blood against the Goblin King (tell me, what did he do to you?)

This is really good. It would be okay as a standalone but I think you should write some more to explain, is this after the Labyrinth? Or did the Labyrinth never happen or something? Again this is reallt good. You're a great author!

P.S. I really like the title

I think the idea is okay and I like your story so far but you need to expand on it. You've said that the chapter is the first one yet at the bottom of it, it says 'The end'. Also, is it because of Sarah's mother's death that her father is raping her? I don't know if anybody else can go through a whole character change in such a short while.

Did I read that right? "The End"? Whaaaaaat? C'mon it's a great story! More pleaaaaaase!