| Reviews for Betwixt |
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  Matt chapter 5 . 11/21/2019 They consumed their bond. Really? You know that consume means eat. So they ate their bond? No, you dolt, they consummated their bond, which is entirely different. You should consider learning English some time, particularly if you're going to write in english. |
| Matt chapter 3 . 11/21/2019 What is your problem with the word "size"? You keep typing "seize" instead. They mean completely different things. Check a dictionary. And get a beta - maybe two! |
| Matt chapter 2 . 11/21/2019 Emily does NOT have a wound on her face! She has a scar. A scar is what remains after a wound has healed. A wound is a fresh cut or burn. Once it's healed, it's not a wound any more. |
| Matt chapter 2 . 11/21/2019 "so tired he could even muster up enough energy" couldn't, not could. So tired he Couldn't muster up enough energy. Pay attention to what you're saying - if you don't say what you mean, it confuses your readers. |
| Matt chapter 1 . 11/21/2019 And again you're not explaining things. So originally Harry didn't have his vision of Sirius and go to the Ministry until June, during his OWLS. Why would he have had it in February instead? I'm not against your changing it, but you need to explain why! It took months of Voldemort sending it to him before it got through and he took it seriously in the book. Why did it take so much less time in your story? Also your grammar is lacking - you're leaving out words when you write. You could use a beta. |
| Matt chapter 1 . 11/21/2019 "Faith however seemed to think Harry's fifth year" Who's Faith? Is Faith a person, place or thing? Since there's nobody named Faith in the books, if you're going to mention that name in a story you have to tell us who or what they are. Unless you meant Fate instead of Faith and you typed it wrong? Just trying to understand ... |
| Kushka chapter 6 . 7/27/2019 Ok story |
 cptbludz13 chapter 6 . 5/17/2019 What happened to Remus? Even though he isn't mentioned what happened to Severus? |
| RavenclawGryffindor35 chapter 6 . 4/28/2019 I greatly enjoyed this story! |
| JaimeeAllOver chapter 6 . 1/22/2019 Did I miss what happened to Remus? |
| Child of Dreams chapter 4 . 1/20/2019 Lotro and Wizard101. |
| sarah.clarence.1 chapter 6 . 7/6/2018 who was the fiance? was that supposed to be an important plot pint that just got forgotten? |
| Kia chapter 6 . 3/24/2018 The story was great but i just have one question ... WHERE THE HELL IS REMUS? Did he just dissapear? |
| Thanatophobia kills chapter 1 . 1/6/2018 What if Bellatrix is polyjuiced as Prof. Reilly the salty bitch she is? |
| doxiesmom14 chapter 6 . 6/8/2016 It was a good story and a great ending. Whatever happened to Remus? |
