Dat ending.

It's more than just decent. It's awesome. Here, have a fave.

A reminder: if you remove the author's note at the end, or move it to the beginning, the mood would be preserved right up to reviewtime. I care way more than most people, though, and I decided to review anyway because it was so. freakn. good.

I thought it was good, but I don't know that much about poetry. I do think that this could have worked better as a piece of prose, but you've got a good start, so it wouldn't be to hard to make it better if you wanted.

Decent.

That was pretty decent. The way that Ash was feeling about how Evil Ash took part of him and became his dark side was simply awesome. Keep up the good work on the Malevolentshipping stories.

This reminds me of a MalevolentShipping story I read, very nicely done with telling a story

wow...nice! :)