I like it keep it up

If you *are* in fact seriously considering a 2016 rewrite of this story, I do have some suggestions.

I like the idea of a character like Tiffany, but there are two major things I would suggest thinking about.

The first is that I don't think it makes a great deal of sense for her to have used her influence to get into the Spartan program, among other things because the Spartan program is not something any sane parent would want their child participating in and because they're a close-knit group that would immediately recognize an outsider. One thing that I think would make more sense is if she was taken into the program, but then her parents somehow managed to get her *out* and tried to raise her as a semi-normal child despite her augmentations.

The other main issue is her personality. She just seems... "off" for being a partially-civilianized Spartan, immature but in a way that *runs counter* to the fact that she actually decided to come back to the Program. I'd suggest doing some research into the behavior of modern paramilitary wannabe groups like militias, survivalists, and those weird vigilante outfits American police often refer to as "wackers".

PLEASE try to finish this story. I really want to see how it ends.

So sad this isnt being continued :( please continue it dude I like it :D

Great story, well rounded OCs. You really managed to make Tiffany easy to dislike. Some minor grammar/spelling errors but nothing that takes your attention away from the story. I'd love to see this story continued.

Super awesome story abd u cant wait to read the rest.

That was a bit of bullshit having a spartan die to a injured elite... A spartan wouldnt be stupid enough to walk up to a injured elite which has an energy sword instead the spartan would ruthlessly kill the elite from a distance.

But good story by thae way really liking it.

I wanted to start crying when I saw that the story hadn't been updated since October and there was a good cliff hanger! I'm sad to think that this story may have very few updates- if any- in the future! Please prove me wrong!

I love it.. Please continue this lovely story c:

MORRRRE PLZ... XD I love how they make tiny love.. So awesome

oh please write more! Its getting so GOOD!

i love this story so freaking much tgat i re read it again. I can not wait for another update, i hope college is treating you well. :)

I've spent some time catching up on this story and its about time that I officially faved and followed it. Love these two characters and looking forward to the next chapter!

It's actually the 20th century Snow White was written

you have issues if you are satisfied with making Spartans yell and scream at each other acting like over glorified spoiled children