Wooo! You updated and its awesome!

this was a great chapter and i was wondering. What's wrong with Sunstar's name?

I really like this sty so far!

It was a fine chapter, even if it is shorter than I like. :) I'm going to post some errors I found; I don't want you to take this the wrong way. Let me know if you're offended in any way.

Original: Puddleheart seamed to understand her excitement, "We'll get to all that..."

Firstly, 'seemed' is spelled wrong, but that wasn't really a problem. :) The speech tag (which labels a bit of dialogue and says who's presently speaking; it can come before and after a bit of dialogue) was a full sentence in this case, and didn't need the comma. In a different case where the speech tag is NOT a full sentence (ex: Flicking his tail dismissively he said, "Then go wait...") it needs a comma, because the dialogue finishes it and makes it a complete sentence. I won't mention all of the snippets where it had the same mistake, but if you'd like me to review them all, please let me know! :)

Instead: Puddleheart seemed to understand her excitement. "We'll get to all that..."

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Original: it felt wonderful to use words!

This is the same as above, only it comes after the bit of dialogue.

Instead: It felt wonderful to use words!

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Original: Confused Silentkit followed...

Instead: Confused, Silentkit followed... (This was barely a mistake at all, but I mentioned it just in case.)

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Original: "Lets see your best crouch."

Instead: "Let's see your best crouch." (Same with this one.)

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Original: ...ended the mouse's live.

Instead: ...ended the mouse's life. (And this one.)

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Original: StarClan I may not be able to serve my clan as a medicine cat but I promise I will serve them even better as a warrior!

Instead: StarClan, I may not be able to serve my Clan as a medicine cat, but I promise I will serve them even better as a warrior! (AND this one...)

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Original: Silentkit realized that her tail tip had been twitching above her head, causing the ferns and bracken to wave crazily, casting wild shadows on the forest floor.

This was a run-on sentence.

Instead: Silentkit realized that her tail tip had been twitching above her head, causing the ferns and bracken to wave crazily and cast wild shadows on the forest floor.

I hope I wasn't too harsh... Your story is great, but I try to point out as many things as possible to help the story. :) If you have any questions, feel free to ask in the author's note in the next chapter. I can't wait to see the next chapter! Update soon! xD

bookworm2091

great chapter. Please update quickly.

Wow, this is really good! I feel bad for Silentkit... it's not her fault she doesn't want to be a medicine cat... Still, keep it up! :-)

great story! Please update

Ha, that's funny, I had the same idea a while ago to write a story about a kit called Silentkit! :) Of course, I'm in the midst of starting it right now, but since I don't have an account on FanFiction (it's so saddening!), I won't be posting it online.

It's very good, and I really want to read more! Please continue! :) It's going a completely different path than my story is taking, but it's interesting to see how similar and different it is compared to mine. For Sunstar's name, do you like Lightningstar? Anyway, update soon! )

bookworm2091