Awesome! Please keep writing, this was a lot of fun to read.

So damn hot and awesome. There are many typos, still a great piece of lemony goodness.

Lot of fan fiction

Pink haired dragons and blonde haired princesses...srsly dude?

Pink haired dragons and blonde haired princesses...srsly dude?

This was THE best fanfic I have ever read, you did such a good job with detail and painting the picture in our heads, good job

... well then.

not bad... the pairing is shit tho

Wow. Like wow. *blushes*
Like to be honest this is one of da best lemons in hereee (thank u smol cute bean for writing this).
It wasn't just like plain u-know-what, it was also kinda beautiful i think? Cause they were so comfortable with each other and so trusting and in love and that's what that all is about. Haven't been a passionate nalu fan before but hell if i ain't one now.

lots of love and appreciation 3

Wow. I love it. Not the nasty parts but the cuteness between them.

This was pretty well written besides some of the confusing sentences such as the one where it said "she took her arm as her pillow" didn't make sense but I liked everything else.

One of the best i have read!

Good God...
I wish I knew where to start, but - Wow. Holy hell that was hot. Those two have always had chemistry, but that kind of passion was just...
I think I died a little. Who knew it could be so sweet.

For this being out-of-character behavior (at least this early on in their timeline, we hope haha), it was surprisingly in-character. It didn't seem awkward or forced. In terms of your writing, I mean.

The writing alone was marvelous, even without the juicy details. The pacing, the believable characterisations, the spot-on adjectives, etc - the whole thing was mind-blowing.

I can't wait to see what else you've shared. Brava ~

AMAZING

It was so good i loved how Lucy mentioned Virgo