sweet , nice,.. and lovely

big brain time

Une suite j'aime.

Interesting

Wow your a natural born writer!

You didn't surprise us with the ending so much as disappoint.

The Simpsons Fate dealt in school like that movie that my boy by Sean Anders

what a ripoff

Buena historia.

Bart sufrio porque Edna escogió a Skinner, pero eso era lo mejor para todos.

El final es muy sentimental.

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Good story.

Bart suffered because Edna chose to Skinner, but that was best for everyone.

The finish is very sentimental.

I am so proud of Bart, nice ending.

ALL HAIL DARTHDRAGON!

Well I say that story isn't bad, was rushed a bit in the start and didn't give enough time for development.

And despite the age difference, a relationship of any kind isn't as far fetched as some may think, don't forget the episode where Bart pretended to a guy that was interested in her and when he saw how much he was inadvertently hurting her, he wrote another fake letter letting her down easy cause as much of a prankster he is, he found he couldn't toy with Edna's emotions and hopes for a relationship.

Episode: 16 Season: 3

(raises hand) I did, Still didn't like the fact. Awww well, I will wait to see what developes.

ALL HAIL DARTHDRAGON!

In the words of Jeff Albertson, a.k.a. Comic Book Guy:

The plot is too fast paced, the introduction brought in almost no character development and was colder than Mr. Freeze (played by Arnold Schwarzenegger in Batman Forever that is), and the whole idea driving this story is comparable to a Bob the Builder fanfiction about Bob having a gay relationship with Lofty the Crane, something that is purely borderline Rule 34 content.

In short, and forgive me for the capitals, FIFTIETH WORST SIMPSON-THEMED SEMI-EROTIC GRAMMATICALLY-CORRECT EXPLOITATION FANFICTION EVER.

In my words:

On a more positive note, this is a much better read than most of the other fanfictions out there that exploit sex and outlandish relationships and throw characters of popular fiction into the pot of toxic internet literature, not so different to the Twilight series and the despicable fanfiction that stemmed from it.

Though at least this story has good word choices and good grammar, one thing I can't stand (besides the Lolita style storyline) is the pacing. I mean, they bloody kissed each other for no apparent reason at all, and right after the story started. Even in that kind of love story, kisses don't happen till beyond the 3rd or 4th chapter (depending on the pace of the story).

My advice is this: work on the pacing, allow character development at the beginning but let the kiss go off too early (love doesn't go that fast). Set the kiss back a few chapters, get Edna and Bart to notice something going on between each other, but then try leaving Bart be confused about his feelings till the next time he meets Edna. It's conflict that drives the story, and Bart not knowing what he feels and his drive to find out is the thing that can drive the story.

And if you thought that I was offended by this story, continue to offend me, because it's stories like this which remind me that Freedom of Speech on the internet is unrestricted and nobody can do anything to remove such stories and images from the Internet. I have no right to take down websites with images of incest and stories of sex on the internet, and I have no right to take down fanfiction that includes Child-Teacher relationships involving popular cartoon characters, and for reminding me of that fact, I thank you.

I hope you get your story up to tip-top shape.

I might be one of the few people who accually this story. Bart and Enda who would of thought? I like unthinkable pairings they cause conversey and a lot of interesting delemias. Yes Bart is ten so it is a little creepy when he says "Wow…you're quite a kisser Ms. Krabappel." But nevertheless very good. I don't think Edna and Bart hate each other. Bart and Skinner devitinly hate each other. So don't tell Skinner about their kissing..HA! You can see in Bart-Edna epesiodes there is something maybe not a releshionship like in your story but something. Your ending left me hanging now I can't wait to read a next chapter so hussle your bussle and write another chapter please and thank-you :D

You can count on that man.

ALL HAIL DARTHDRAGON!