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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! MY EYES!

Ahem. Why, might I ask, are these sentences not properly joined together in neat little paragraphs? It appears very messy. Now, your character is very vague. The reader gets a brief insight on their family and such, but the way it is presented makes it appear a little unneccessary.

I also have a problem with your character herself (or is it male?). For example, "I'm totally not bragging here but my parents are really smart, plus they're just plain awesome". Why are they awesome? What are their personalities? It'd be interesting to know who they are.

And there is one last thing. The meme of "protecting family secrets from the bad people" is a little...old. However, if you took care to maybe enlighten the reader on the characters, the villians and such, it has some good backbone.

Now this may seem a bit harsh, but just the layout of this made my eyes bulge. If you just took the time to re-organize them, everything will even out. The grammar and punctuation is used nicely, though.

I love it and yes please

Excelent chapters! Your OC work is amazing, I feel like they're part of the cast of characters for Speed Racer! Speaking of Speed Racer, you're doing an excellent job of his character, too. Not a lot of people get Speed Racer right these days. Can't wait for chapter 4!

Good story. But in response to your author's note (in wich you said that there wasn't a section for Speed Racer)... Well, there is. But it's really confusing. There's the original series under Anime, the movie under Movies, and TNG under Cartoons. Trust me, you're not the only one to get it mixed up. The movieverse fanfiction has pretty much taken over the section that should be for the original series. But seriously, continue this.