When I first read it, I was a little confused. But I read it a second time, and I realized what a bacca I am xD I realized the deepness of this fanfic, and all I want right now is a length revision! It would've been more wonderful if you made it longer.

Hm... This is strange... Is this when he is alive or when he is in the afterlife?

This was very well made. It fits Naoi and his emotions at the time. It was short, but meaningful.

This is a great exploration of Naoi before he becomes the deputy head of the student council. I like how you portrayed his thoughts, and the words you picked were just right, not exaggerated and rather straightforward, giving the reader the same emptiness Naoi feels. The last line was my favourite, because of the strength of those words. I also loved how you said that both of the brothers died and only his father's dream survived. Short but quite well done (: