This is a great Negima Horror fic with zombies and I was saddened by the deaths of certain characters including Kazumi and Satomi though my favorite characters are: Negi, Ayaka, Mana, Kaede, Setsuna, Konoka, Evangeline and Chachamaru.

This was very well written and l liked the Kotaro/Chisame moments I thought it was quite an interesting coupling.

All in all a great story!

Uhh, it seems that I'm the first to point out the following.

Were you inspired by or based this story off of Treyarch's Nazi Zombies? Because there are a lot of elements from that game in here. Here's my evidence:

-Negi and Kotaro both notice a thick fog moving in and soon after, Asuna sees a person staggering to them. That's similar to how the first level, "Natch Der Untoten" started; You woke up in a field, with heavy fog, a crashed WW2 bomber nearby and zombies heading towards you.

-Having Mana as one of the main characters, her being the first to attack the zombies. As far as I know at the moment, one of her hobbies is collecting and using different kinds of guns and all player characters (excluding the ones in 'Call of the Dead') are soldiers that are trained to handle any kind of weapon.

-I know it's part of the standard defense against zombies but the first few chapters, it focuses on boarding up doors and windows, which is part of the main gameplay in Nazi Zombies.

-Zombies becoming more intelligent. While not exactly the same, the game does become quite clever (and sometimes cruel) in where the zombies will spawn in later rounds.

-The First's backstory. I figured this one out even before The First was even mentioned. In his backstory, he was experimented with an unknown chemical, which is similar to Group 935's experiment with Ununpentium, an element (#115) that came to Earth in a meteor. They used said element to create teleporters, create the 'Wunderwaffe' weapons research and even created the zombies due to missuse of the element.

-The First noticing that he can control the zombies is done differently in the game; one of the group's members goes insane after an incident involving the teleporters and not only kills the group's leader, he also kills the leader's young daughter and her pet dog with the teleporters. Somehow, the child, Samantha, ends up being the one who controls the zombies.

-The First's toying with the cast is also similar to Samantha; not only does she sends zombies your way, she also drops power-ups like Max Ammo and Insta-Kill.

Honestly, if this is all a coincidence and you've never heard of Treyarch's Nazi Zombies, that is one HELL of a coincidence.

It probably didn't help me that I kept humming '115' all throughout the story. (Such a kick-ass song...)

Regardless, I very much liked this a lot. Faved!

I truely loved this story alot! I loved how you made the fighting scenes in the story. But what I don't understand and I find a bit funny is that Asuna wasn't part of this battle and she didn't use her artifact throughout this whole ordeal. But you probably knew that and decided to leave Asuna out of thi. Everything was amazing from beginning to finish. But I do have to admit I am a KotaNatsu fan. But KotaChi is not all that bad! :) Im gonna read the sequel now! :D

Ok, no sugarcoating. This piece of literature is extremely good. Your story is great, the action sequences are descriptive, and the main characters are fully realized. That being said, it does have it's flaws, as all stories do. Grammar was adequate, and could do with some checking here and there. Spelling was almost ok, but it got bad during the action, which is understandable. You do have the gift to be a good writer, but these flaws cripple this piece. My suggestion is to first write it on word, as to use spell check, and then copy - paste it onto the site. If you fix these problems in future stories, you will be successful.

Spelling/Grammar - C-

Story - A

Writing Technique - B

Overall - B

Epic but a few points was miss

-Why didn't Negi use his Dark magic(Magia Embreia)

-Why didn't the others help ex: Harunas artifact,Asuna's Artifact and Setsunas artifact

-why the heck didn't Kotaro use his Beast form

thats all from my review

It was a very good story.

nice work and I hope you put out more zombie fics later and hopefully a KotaXChisame LEMON Based off of MWN! See YA!

Evangeline!, I thought what to Evangeline would happen something O_O, Mana doesn't told nothing to them, already finished the story T_T, all right!, I will wait the next story!

The battle was epic and well thought out. Great job.

Wow...those scientists were idiots of the highest order!

Kotaro and Chisame, huh? To me, a very unusual pairing, but I think it's doable.

Looks like the zombies have upped their game.

I liked much this chapter *O*, if who changed Yatsun O_O, The First was defeating to all them, Evangeline appeared , Akiras got very happy when saw Evangeline XD, went a battle difficult but in the end they managed for defeat The First , update soon please, what will happens now?, this interesting, cheer up!

"The First" really reminds me of Albert Wesker from the Resident Evil games (minus the background stories). Anyhow, I foresee a great and terrible battle to be waged... I sincerely hope you can write a battle worthy of the title "Armageddon".

I liked much this chapter *O*, They will trust in The first, Will be one trap?, I'm confused also like Setsuna and Akiras XD, the father of Akiras be alive? O_O, Why the First went to tell to them?, Is strange what The First tell to Akiras and Setsuna and he dosen't has control about him, Kotaro let go out of the wardrobe Yatsun, Will be truth what Yatsun change?, update soon please, what will happens now?, this interesting, cheer up!

I liked much these chapters *O*, Kotaro told Natsumi what he loves to Chisame by lucky Natsumi doesn't got mad at Kotaro, the body of the mother Akiras still was in the toilet O_O, by lucky Akiras doesn't saw the body, Will Evangeline be interested with the information?, appeared the lider!, what horrible past O_O, Mana furious with him, she got mad with him, soon they will meet with the lider, update soon please, what will happens now?, this interesting, cheer up!

About The First Infected's' story, I think what is interesting, the lider had a past bad, and now he controls all the undead moreover he has skills the others O_O

I can't wait to see the next chapter