I love how you write Grimmjow x Ichigo.

Nicely done.

Gah! It's not a G-spot! XD still love it

You should definately continue this!

oh this has to have a second chapter I want to see Ichi's reaction to finding out he;s going to be a "queen" and what happens after.

that was really good! GrimmIchi all day everyday

Every paragraph except the third and the last, were too long and make for a difficult visual reading. You also need to fix the typos.

I think you should include 'OOC' in your summary. They are both so out of character (IMO), that I couldn't get into the story at all...

i love grimm and ichi! hehe this was great!

I don't think anyone has tried something as straight foreword as this before(idea wise) But I like it. With a little more plot, patience and love, and not being straight to the point, this could be a beauty. I'd write it.

Hm, well this isn't as bad as it could be I suppose. You used their names too often, a lot of 'Ichigo this' and 'Grimmjow that', so changing that up would be good. Also try and find a beta to help minimize spelling and grammatical mistakes. Spacing out the text some more would be easier on the eyes too. :)

If you do another chapter can you have spaces between the lines? Its kind of hard to read.