Wow... That was dark... I liked it though. I didn't see the "Tell me, Kagome, have you ever been to hell?" part or the ending after it. I should've, but I'm just dumb like that :)

It was rather enjoyable... I don't see why anyone would flame you...

oh, that was good! The best thing was the constant "Tell me, have you ever been to hell?" at the beginning and the "Tell me, Kagome, have you ever been to hell?" at the end. That one sentence, built of the foundation of a writing not seen in years, felt as if a lead weight slammed into me. The story flowed and held me captive, for the most part. The words and wiving in and out, creating a view that none have thought. However, this beauty, this way of writing is a double edged sword. Although nice, there have been times it felt as if it were running on. At times i would zone out (only to be pulled back in again... but that's not the point). Pay attention. Don't ramble. And, please, keep with this writing style... i like it.