Please upload

When is the next chapter coming out? I want to know what happens next. Just curious no pressure.

awww sad but hurry up and update

How could it be silver when in the flashback it was said that it was paul? o.O

Okay Silver is a butt in this story but I LOVE THE STORY XD

Hihiiii!

New reviewer here, old fan :3

Eeepppppppp! :D I ams in loves with your story, er stories, er.. writing.. er... *shot* xD

Oh mah gawshes. Dawn and Paul in this story are so awesome! *-* Heck, this whole story is awesome!

I thought I had more words to say, but you got me speechless. And I'm a loudmouth! :D

Bskcixnwlxwonnfbeisislpe! XD XD

Can't wait for your next chappieee!

Animeandmangalover16

YAAAAAAAY! Updates! I love all of your stories so much!

Pancake didn't wanna take a break, but Pancake thinks updating is hard. Don't hurt me! *flinch* Oh, Lolololol Purple... Purple walruses. :D I liked the ending. Idk, I just felt it was a good description of vertigo and slipping into unconsciousness? Good work Dess. Hey, message me or something. I need more opinions.

-Flute, who is still alive. (Gleek numero uno.)

WOW! Loved this chapter! GREAT BATTLE SCENE!

I told you once, now I shall tell you again: This was great! xD

"I believe in you." OH PAUL. Fangirl moment! Squeeeeeee! xDDDDD

OLOLOL PURPLE.

Lynx

After all they've done Dawn is still taken away...

Yeah, you updated! :D

This chapter got really wild at the end, but what made it that way was because you had built up the pace for it at the beginning of the chapter with the interaction between Dawn and Paul, which was adorable by the way. It gained momentum before the fight which was exactly what needed to be done!

It was interesting to get Paul’s POV for this chapter; we really see how he cares for Dawn. In comparison to the beginning, he’s gone under major character development and you displayed that greatly. Gahh, but you made him get hit with a POSION arrow? D:

I think it was good that you added in all the other characters to help them fight out the battle, because Dawn and Paul against a bunch of people would have been really hard, but then Paul is pretty amazing.

Anyhow, great chapter! ;D Update when you can

I really liked the metaphor and personification you used here: :)

“Her soft breathing became a small harmony in my ears.”

“Kenny smirked as he witnessed the scene and snaked his arm around Zoey's waist”

First, OLOLOL PURPLE second, no Paul! C'mon mini army! BEAT THE CRAP OUT OF THOSE GUYS! WHOOOO! XD

Omg u have to update sooonnn plz?

talk about awkward for those 2!

cute Kenny -_-' very cute. (not- his reaction when he saw Dawn and Paul)

LOL a rolling pin! yay May, Drew, Leaf, Garry, Ash and Misty are here! Lucas ans Riley are as well cool!

what's that noise?

LORL! Ash and his stomach!

not good... Silver took her right? I hope there's an antidote to the poison!

there are some errors:

ignoring the fact that Dawn and Iwere both nearly naked and in a very awkward position.

I stopped in my tracks an d quickly pulled out my rapier.

he gave me a sympathetic look and quickly finished off the last of his people and dashed towards me. "Are you okay?" He questioned, helping me sit up."

overall good job! well done! good luck with the next chapter! w