grammar issues but great work

cute family fic...few grammar errors

Happy new year
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God bless

This was wonderful! I loved it. :) Bravo!

the pleasure was all mine. such a nice story with a great message in it. what are iblings worth if not to protect eachother when the time calls for it.

owww, that was really really lovley 3

Now I'm really curious. What exactly is Dastan talking about? What weakness? Please update so I can find out! Update soon!

EEEEEEEEEP! I love it! It was SO cute and fluffy and epic and you get a tackle hug and it was SPARTAAAAAAA! EEEEK! ? I'm all happy now! FANTAAAAAAAAAAAAAASTIC! ? *High fives*

Aw! Maybe it's just a me thing, but my favorite kind of love in the entire world is the relationship between siblings - most especially between brothers! This was cute and awesome while still keeping the princes in the character of guys - they didn't go off in some poetic confession about how they loved each other, just promised to cover each other's backs.

AWESOME FIC!

~Bubbles

Good story, I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Great story! I really liked the way you gave Garsiv and Tus very distinct personalities, and your child version of Dastan was great. I absolutely loved the part where Tus threatens to have Dastan go back to the streets. It was completely adorable. The one thing I think would dramatically improve the story would be to remove the last line. Finishing it with "Because we know you'll always be there for us" would be alot more dramatic and meaningful, in my opinion. Other than that, I thought this was amazing.

Hmmm. A good concept and rather cute, but it could have used some touching up, especially in the fluffy areas-but it was your first time, so not that big of a deal. It was well-written and I'd like to see more from you in the future :3

Also, I'm happy to see Tus! He doesn't get enough attention, the poor boy. -pets him- And I love his character way more than Dastan's, it made me sad that he only got like three lines in the movie XD

So yes! Keep up the good work, but maybe try looking for a beta reader/editor/whatever you wanna call it for the fluffy parts (and if all else fails, you can contact me and I'll help XD /shamelessadvertising) to make your future work even better in the future! Very well-done...except I don't think Garsiv would ever let anybody call him 'Gar'. XD

Wow, I love this story, especially the interactions between father and sons, something that you don't often see.

Any chance of a sequel?

Nice, except I think you meant to write "princess" at the very end. :)

this is amazing, i love it! the brothers interaction in the first part was funny and adorable and the ending was great