Hi there! Well, interesting first chapter. But since everyone has given you nothing but positive reviews, I will offer some constructive criticism. There are a lot of grammatical and syntax errors, which is the main issue.

"I had wandered for many ages of the men" The correct sentence would be, "I had wandered for many Ages of men..."

"I spoke to her, 'you are walking far today?' I asked" There should be a full stop after 'I spoke to her." 'You' should start with a capital letter.

In the second chapter, I noticed that you had written 'television' with a capital T. Not done! 'Television' is not a proper noun.

Aside from all that, I noticed that both Maglor and Bronwyn are getting along a bit too easily - and unrealistically. I don't think any woman - no matter how compassionate she is - would just take in some homeless vagabond from the beach.

Another problem would be Bronwyn's reaction to Maglor when she finds out that he's an Elf. If I were her, I would have run in the other direction screaming 'Alien!'. Or I would have thought he was insane. Either way, I just cannot see how a human woman could react so level-headedly after seeing a 'real live Elf.'

Perhaps my next question is answered in later chapters, but since I'm short of time I can't read them: How did Maglor learn English? How does he know what a photograph is? How did an Elvish script get into Egypt? And if Maglor knows English, he would have had to go about in the city/town some time; which means he would have been labelled as a freak because of his ears and skin, and probably come out in the papers.

Take care,

Maglor

i love this fic and i think its just fantastic and i was wondering, if you wouldnt mind, could you possibly update? please? its just so good id hate too see it remain unfinished...

Amazing story, but there's only one fault; it is still unfinished!

I have to say that it really is a shame, not being able to read what happens next, and will Bronwyn and Maglor end up together, and so on...

I know its been years since you last updated, but please, do try to finish this.. ;)...anyway, good luck with any future projects you may have!

Jillian, my love, do give me hope of seeing some Maglor goodies again!

yours very humble friend,

shey

A very interesting take on Maglor. I love all these snippets on what he has done between the First Age and nowadays. I hope you haven't abandoned this project, it is unique and very well done. I could quibble over some spellings, but that's a minor thing really, I just want more Maglor. :)

-jaw drops- Good Valar! (Yes I do actually say that.) This...is...so...FREAKING AWESOME! I love it! You must update soon! And I had to take a break from reading this to eat and I thought about the whole 'last one to be redeemed' thing before I read it and how it might fit in. o.0 Freaky.

ANYWAYS, you must update soon! I luff it!

Chloe

I am just now finding your writing, and had to stop and let you know how much I enjoy it. It is nice to 'see' both points of view. (I am tickled that Bronwyn has an F100!)

OK, I've finished reading. Interesting story with great characters.

Tell me where is that sea bank I need to find one Maglor for me and take Him home...

Huh, not here I guess, to cold...

Pitty for the moment first thing I have to write is complaint... IMHO you lost the main plot of the story. I guess It supposed to be about Maglor and his dastiny, his release... Now we have details of the I World War and a few other things... Forgive me, but it doesn't join with the story for me. Not in such a large amount (although it was interesting to learn of playing cricket before Turkish army). The main quest should be most important.

Someone said before in a review that you're writting this story like a 'soap opera' and it was good in the person's mind. I think it's not. There are so many fantastic details and I enjoyed them in the begining, but now it became to much of them :( We're loosing the goal... To many meals, coffees and similar things.

The conversations of Maglor's past in the First Age, of his feelings towards the woman, the porfecies - thet's what I enjoyed the most. Also his own considerations of differencies between mortals and elves and between the old and present times.

And I ejoyed him talking to animals, especialy the whale :D

Please keep on writting, don't give up! But focus on the main plot of the story - I find it is Maglor, his love towards Bronwyn and his release. Too long the terrible oath is tormenting him... Many people commited such crimes during so many wars we had and they didn't have to pay such cruel price for it as he is paying.

It should be Fëanor suffering for eternity not his most gentle-spirit son :(

Now I need to admit what I liked. Finally :)

Actually I should do it before complaining...

I love your way of introducing the characters - very plastic and lively, realistic.

But Maglor seems to drift from the lost ancient elf we meet in the begining to a person who is just a hih tech fellow. Of course he was smart person and he could learn so many things in his life but he wouldn't be homeless tramp then, I guess. As Highlander or one of other similar characters we might compare. I liked better this shy brooding elf from the first chapter.

What more I love about him is the way he behaves, so subtle, gentle and carefull.

And all the references to what the elves think of nudity. My thought was of Vanyar and Teleri to be really careless in that matter and Noldor more modest, but all of them treating it as a natural thing - comparing to us, shy and of our bodies...

He prefers to walk barefoot, great idea! :D

After one of Cirdan's fic where he was living a hermit life till the IVth Age when he finally sailed West with with Celeborn, sons of Elrond and others I see him on the board quite absent minded (lost deep in his own world) standing close to a balustrade, his hair flying with wind, clad in a simple white robe and barefoot... Looking at the approaching shore of Valinor. I wish to draw it someday.

I love the way he sings, so magicall! Really beautifull with time passing differently, images in the sea, peaceful dreams :)

This aspect of him was never used in The Silmarillion! Why! If Finrod could duel Sauron with songs of might why not Maglor? The best Noldorian bard never tried it! O_o Mystery...

He should 'sing out' Dior to give back the silmarill, sing the truth which would made understand peoples of Doritah why Fëanorians need to claim the jewels. There was no need for an army, they should send Maglor with polite, charmy request. Who could resist him?

But they send the annoying letters instead... Puf...

All those tenderness towards Bronwyn and her friends, lovely. Although I couldn't stand 'just a friend' so beautiful male (and male at all) to hold me so much, touch so often and kiss me... Br! I would be gone... Helpless. Or most likely keep him on distnace and nothing would happen betwen us :/

Fortunatley Bronwyn is not me :D

OK, there was more thinghs I liked but I can't remember now... I'm tired after reading whole night and already there is long after midday. No sleeping today.

Regards,

Hathor (Sirielle)

Still a loyal reader...and my wish is granted! yay, an update! It's very rare for me to feel this kind of anticipation for the continuation of a story - but here I am, biting my nails to see what happens next.

What a great story loving every word of it I have never read the simarillion but I have a copy of it in my house. Due to your story I want to read it I am sure I will as well very soon. Loving your characters each and every one of them! Please keep writing lots of love and hope of more Fanfic love alex

Wonderful! Very good work. I can't write to save my life and it awes me to see people like you write things like this!
Namarie
-Nimthoron

Ah, so you did post it! As I said before, I love the atmosphere of this interlude, the vivid images of Gallipoli and the importance of remembrance and memory for mortals and Elves alike. It does something to me.

this rocks cant wait till i get to the next chapter so that means i will have to end this review buh bye

Mae Govannen!
WOW! I am so glad you have finally updated this story.
This latest chapter is so sad, but I did enjoy it.
Your decriptions on the beach mad me feel as if I was really there.
I hope you update with another chapter really soon. This story is one of my favorites, I really do love it. PLEASE don't take too long!
Love,
Lady Mirwen

I really hope you will continue this story...it has been quite a while since there was an update. I wouldn't be exaggerating if I said this is the best Maglor story I've ready - and I've read my fair share!-