Aww...so cute! :) I really enjoyed this story and how you captured Caius and Athenodora, I think you did a wonderful job.

~ForeverGoldenHeart

Ooh, and they say only the vegetarians can do that. Lies. XD Very nice job on capturing this obscure couple so well, and with their powerful, manipulative natures hinted at, too.

-Weasley-

That was really, really good! So much so that I am going to refrain from my usual reviewing style of a combination of emoticons and overuse of the word 'awesome'. No, your writing has put me in a mindset to use a more mature choice of vocabulary, more like my word selection of when I am writing my own fiction. Or fanfiction.

I thought this was very descriptive, especially the pshysical interaction between them. And the way your described her surfacing from the water gave Athenodora a personality that you managed to upkeep until the end; very dramatic and as you said, 'theatrical'. You did a good job of using metaphors and similies to illustrate her apperance, too.

In this case, the mimimum use of speech worked really well; it was the description and actions that were important here. I think when you are using a lot of description, you have to be careful not to go overboard with speech, as it can ruin an atmosphere created by the description. Since this story is supposed to be short, you definitely made a good descision to put in only a few sentences of verbal interaction, as there wasn't very much to build on from speaking (ie moving the story forward, which would be essential in a multi chapter story) and the fic was very much centered on how Caius and Athenodora interact with each other, rather than how they verbally communicate.

I also though that you did a brilliant job of showing Caius's thoughts on Athenodora without writing in first person. That is a very hard thing to do. My fics always lack in a character's thoughts and feelings, as I tend to put more emphasis in senses, even if they are in first person. I always admire a writer who manages to successfully capture the mind of a character.

I really enjoyed reading this story and I hope you write more. In general and on this pairing. You are definitely someone who I would like to read more of, if that makes any sense!

Good job.

There's so much tenderness and sweetness in this piece of writing. I like it :)

-Kyilliki

Wow. I was looking for a good, accurate story of the both of these and found this. Thank you.