| Reviews for No More Nice Bella |
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   LadyViolet2112 chapter 1 . 8/13 Personally, I would have dogged Edward out a bit more. However, this was a great story. Thanks for sharing |
| merniizztat chapter 17 . 7/24 I like... |
| andrewpine chapter 4 . 3/31 Why do you break up the paragraphs the way you did? I do did want to finish this since I like the pairing but it is just so hardly written I can't. Please find a beta and rewrite it. |
| andrewpine chapter 3 . 3/31 Gianna .,scent .,until.. Excellent. then I went... It releaved me. He left,I signed... The way the paragraphs are set up is very annoying.. Also you are leaving out words or using the wrong ones. Could have used a beta or pre-reader. |
| Daughter-of-the-Big-Three1301 chapter 7 . 2/29 Poor bed. Well, at least it gave its life for a good cause. |
| Phoebe Nicole chapter 12 . 4/8/2019 I'm banana lol |
| Taylor eaglebear chapter 6 . 3/8/2019 she is covered in blood thou |
| AnonGurl08 chapter 5 . 5/21/2018 Ok. I tried, I really did try to soldier through this. I love Demetri pairings, so that's why I tried. BUT! I just couldn't finish this. Chapter 5 is as far as I am going to get. This seriously needs to be fixed. Like the sentences need to be in the same paragraphs not broken off willy-nilly at any random juncture. And punctuations need to be used as well as some basic elementary grammar at the least. I'm not fussing but I am critiquing you. You can do much better if you slow it down and just pay attention. Pick up a book if you need to just to see paragraph and sentence structure. |
| Missysue32 chapter 6 . 3/15/2018 There just gonna go to the library with Bella’s whole chest covered in blood? |
| Bell 1 chapter 17 . 10/21/2017 I wanted to enjoy this story, but the misused words, grammar, and punctuation made that difficult. Plus, the lack of a plot caused me to lose interest. However, I soldiered through. Over all, I like the idea of Demetri and Bella together, but the lack of substance to the story (plot), combined with the lack of editing made it difficult to get into. I applaud your courage to write and post your story idea. Keep learning. A beta and a pre-reader could help you. If writing is something you enjoy, keep learning and improving yourself, but don't give up. Learning from others is a good way to continue improving one's self. |
| Miss.BonnieBSalvatore chapter 17 . 10/9/2017 Omg please put one more chapter involving the kids I love to see how Aro, Caius and Marcus react to the children and to see how they adjust to everything. |
| brankel1 chapter 17 . 10/5/2017 Great job. |
| asia.joanna.7334 chapter 17 . 10/4/2017 The story is great! Amazing! Simply amazing! I love your writing and i love this story!I hope you update really soon. !I can't wait to read update soon you story! :) |
| Sammy.jay chapter 17 . 10/3/2017 YAY! So glad you're back! Cant wait to read the revised chapters |
| Guest chapter 17 . 8/22/2016 Id love to have an epilogue |
