I knew I should've checked out your profile sooner, I found you've written all these delicious Pretender fics! I found the X-files one you did and somehow missed all JMP ones! I guess I didn't notice since I only just recently started watching the show, but it's great you're providing me with a dose [overdose!] of these stories. I like the description in this one, I've always found it hard to mix details in with dialogue. You know, like providing an image of what someone is wearing or how they look while they saying something. It can be tricky, if you go off on a tangent, and then write more dialogue because people lose track of where you were.

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Miss Parker's cell phone chimed to life, bringing her out of her reverie. What now? She hit the talk button. "What?" she snapped. She wore a short black skirt and black silk blouse, the color matching her dark mood.

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That line, for example, is cool because you slip in details about her current outfit [I watch the show purely for the UST and her fashion...XP...]and match it to her mood which links it to the character and establishes the setting. You make it look all so easy. I know how hard it is, I'm agonzing over how to go on with my OLD House fic and I can't, writing it is bugging me so much...

Anyway, I should email you properly, this is meant to be a review. Nice work, although it's a little unbelievable that she'd let him disappear so easily. I almost wondered if he was meant to be a hallucination, or her 'sensing' him or something. But this isn't one of those huge twenty chapter deathly serious fics in which I would strongly criticize her letting him go without protest, because it would conflict with the aim of writing something like that, this is supposed to be a sweet little story and you achieved that. As House would say, 'Me likey'!

this is a really vcool story you should habe become a scritwriter for the pretender this is mindblowing stuff

Great job! really liked it. Jarod taking the chance to be there, what is that boy thinking? Loved it! :)

wow I love it!

The personality of the characters is excactly how they would be.

Really good. I liked it alot.

this was a wonderful shipper piece. write more Pretender fare pronto please

Great story!

OoO that was really good!

That was really good. Keep writing.

It was shorter than I normally like, but nice. I think the song fit very very well for Parker. I wish she and Jarod had kissed or something, though! Nice job. ~Danielle :-)

That was one damn good story.

Very good, I hope there's a sequel.

i enjoyed your story and Jarrod is such a romantic.

You intergrated the song nicely and i could definitely see that happening on the pretender.

Loved It!