i want you to contenue this story please and i hope you do

I like how you described Dill's powers better as she is learning to use it more... I like Fred being all strong & silent type and how she respected Diego... Also it's kinda cool how you explored the idea of how they thought themselves to be like 'gods' and Dill tried to disconnect from the last bit of her humanity... very interesting idea that she forgot her memories but could remember things she had learned in school...

What will happen when Bree shows up or will Dill be gone by then?

please update really really really soon!

I like that Dill & Fred seem to be immune to each others gifts... will they become friends, or maybe more?

It was cool to see after the change, cuz SM skips that part in "The Short Second Life..." I like Dillon's gift & am curious to see what all she can do with it as she learns to control and use her power...

This is a nice start, I hope you continue!

I think it's interesting that you had Riley bite her instead of Victoria? Why would Riley do that? Would Victoria be mad that he did? Did he intend to feed off of her but change her instead?

I like the name Dillon, does she have a story behind her name, why is she homeless at age 16? Does she have any family? she said her friends call her Dill, why isn't she staying with her friends, why is she alone?

You did a good job building up some intrigue! I'm curious where you are going with this story, keep it up!

awesome, keep going!