Ah the angst. It's beautifully heartbreaking

That was a lovely piece. I love gracefulshipping as well. Please, do the Wallace part as soon as possible. I can't wait.

Yay, another sweet chapter! Very cute ideas, and a nice analysis of Wallace's character and the beginning of their relationship. Your ideas and descriptions are spot on.

Still, there's the same issues with some grammar and verb tenses! :( For example, the first paragraph mostly in present tense, but then the rest of the story changes to past... I know it's a flashback, and that makes things tricky. But you should probably try writing entirely in past tense - it's much more common and much simpler.

Other than fixing verbs, though, most everything is fine. Also watch out when you do dialogue - whenever a new person talks, you need a new paragraph for their words, if that makes sense.

Keep on writing!

- Kitty

this is so dramatic! i loved this!

-grins-

Hehe, cute. :) Yeah, they are meant to be! -pumps fist in air-

Please do one in Wallace's POV, yusyus~

Nice job! I could feel for Winona, and I'm glad she called him at the end :) Keep writing, and yeah-do post a Wallace thingy! Though I can't guarantee I'll review it right away-going on vacation ;