This is really good. But I have a few suggestions. When using a character's voice avoid diverting from it. For example, as a butler Hagiyoshi would be unlikely to say " brain bleach". Another thing is Hagiyoshi would know what the school name is. Keep the charactr in the back of your mind when writing. Overall I thought that it was a very good story and a really entertaining one.

I see that you're taking the Cast Full Of Gay trope literally... not that there is anything wrong with that. (Heh.) Kyoutarou is going to be so disturbed when he finally works out the implications of this. Anyway, this was kind of funny, though I did not actually expect it to be anything more than simply what would happen when the only two male members of the cast meet.

Yaoi in a yuri manga/anime! I salute you.

Great idea.

Pleaze tell me you're joking. Slash in yuri?