Cute!

So freaking adorable

Great! That was soo cute, I can't even stand it! By the way, I totally get what Lyra was saying about Spinarak, it's adorable.

This would be absolutely perfect if you continued the story. quick follow-ups though. this was probably the best one shot of them i so far have read

cute

This is simply adorable, you deserve a million reviews! Brilliantly written too, very smooth and flowing. No awkward bumps while reading. I really liked it! :D

aw, such a sweet story. (:

This was really very sweet :) It was written in exactly that spirit and line of thought children have, which adds to the cute factor.

Sometimes, it was a little difficult to recognize the characters as Lyra and Ethan, perhaps because they're young here. But I liked how you portrayed Ethan as the hesitant hero and Lyra as the wise girl staying at home. Their interaction was quite nice.

Also, two bonus points for mentioning Red :D (...or Green).

One mistake I noticed;

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He could hear her tapping her pencil; he must have been in the middle of transcribing some of Elm's notes.

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I think you mean 'she' there?

~Snoaz

This is one fabulous story! I prefer how you make Ethan the hero, not Lyra, just like the other fic.

Keep up the good work!