AWH! That last sentence just killed me!

The second person POV was kind of a shock to the system at first, but wow, the follow through. You did a superb job with a very difficult medium.

Also, you captured Ror in character in a way not many people do.

There was only one thing I questioned. His using a 'familiar route' Somehow I don't see Ror using the same route twice in a row. Especially the one along the roof into the apartment.

It was, however, extreemly detailed, accurate and highly enjoyable to read.

Not to mention I loved the last line.

This is writing SO DAMN WELL. The metaphors and general syntax created a dreamy world where we see Rorschach see himself. Very intense. Loved how you had Rorschach distant himself from his body, love how he gave himself to Daniel, love everything!

Exquisitely written and with one of the best ending lines I have ever seen. However, SPIT IS NOT ENOUGH. IT WOULD MAKE DAN BLEED. And also you once mistyped "quacking hands", which made me snort with laughter. Still, I'm faving this.

I quite liked this story. I haven't read many in second person that managed to pull it off, but this was wonderful. Your description was captivating- excellent job.

Wow, I'm just about breathless. That was fantastic. So very in-character the way Rorschach reacts. This is actually the first Rorschach/Dan fic I've read, and I think you may have spoiled me for others. I didn't even notice until after that it had been in 2nd-person present, a hard perspective and tense to pull off, so congratulations. One or two spelling mistakes, notably his hands "quacking" instead of "quaking" (LOL), but I only noticed because... well, quacking. Fantastic job on getting into Rorschach's head.

This was a beautiful (and quite realistic) look into Rorschach and Daniel's relationship. I loved the plot line and the realizations at the end. Very awesome job!

Awwwwwwww... Rorschach and Daniel are just too damn ADORABLE together. :3 And I like this 2nd person writing; it's unique and very well done. Bravo my dear!

this actually bought tears to my eyes at the end D

amazing story :)