Awesome! I really like the flashbacks, and it was a surprise to realize that Bianca didn't even realize that she had died.
Good work! ;)

Sad...
I really wish that i could master the art of writing about a character that i know very little about, without making it seem like a lump of sh**.
You, buddy, have just done to that fic wat i dream about ,i.e. Written it well.
Job well done, soldier.
You deserve cookie!
Yours in Demigodishness and all. Peace out.

this was so sad, and oh so very interesting :)

I can honestly say that this is excellent. Only one thing I would point out is that the di Angelos went to Westhover, not Westhoover. Anyway. The back and forth between the past and the present is done really well. Some distinctly ironic moments in Nico's paranoia and perkiness, considering his later character development.

I would consider this fanon, to be honest. Zoe's philosophy was interesting. Makes you think how may nuggets of wisdom that Hunter has after two thousand years.

This is one of the best kinds of fic. Here's to Musafreen!

-ProudtobePlug

Bianca-centric fic, huh? Awesome. :)

This does seem like a depature from your usual writing style, but I like it. The imagery was vivid and the way you conveyed Bianca's mixed feelings towards her brother was realistic. Nico was also very Nico-before-the-whole-sister-death-like, the epitome of an admiring and rather annoying brother.

However, I felt the ending sentence was a little abrupt. Just my personal opinion, though, and I guess it's to show how she died with no dramatics and quickly.

Um...I've seen a recurring error in quite a few of your fics now, though; the its/it's are getting mixed up. Basically if replacing the word with "it is" will still mean the sentence makes sense, use "it's". If not, no apostrophe in "its".

Anyways, awesome. :)

Depressing... but still well written

I love this. Nobody (at least as I know of) really focuses on Bianca, and how she died, yours is the first I've read.

oh my gods that so sad i almost cried

OMIGOSH. I have no words. That was intense? That was awesome? I dunno. It was something that had me happy to e reading anyways

that was beautiful, if pain can be described as such. love ya!

-Abby T. La Rue

I've never seen Bianca written like this before!

Your grammar is excelant as well as your spelling. You are a flashback genius, and your fluency throughout the oneshot is astounding.

Kudos,

Wise Girl

Wow. This is simply amazing. I love the insights to Bianca's mind, her thoughts, and emotions. You've captured the character perfectly! This is such a touching story. One thing: it's WestOVER not WestHOOVER. :D It's a small thing, and I think that's the only one. Thank you so much for writing. I loved it.

Muzica

That was amazing! It made me pretty emotional. Great job!

Have to love the themes here. You captured Bianca perfectly - the angst was just right, without getting melodramatic (it's hard, I think. But you managed it wonderfully.)

'Shadows flickered in time with the flames.'

I loved that. It's like a line from a poem.

'My fault, an insistent voice said from somewhere inside her. My responsibility.'

Again, the themes are fantastically handled. My favorite flashback was the second one - I love your narrative style.

Thank you for sharing!

This is amazing. I usually like to give a mixture of praise and constructive criticism, but I can't think of anything you could improve. I love the way you explain Bianca's confusion resulting from time-lapse stuff...nice. It's really good.