wow...this is a very good yaoi. i cant wait to start mine!

wow! smex! loved it a lot :D they were so in character as well! if this is your first i cant wait to see the rest! XD

THIS IS THE BEST STORY IN THE WORLD !

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That was soooo fucking awsome Kyo. I especially love the ending. Well you now how i can get. HaHaHahaahaha lols _ Luv It!

Wow for your first fanfic this is really good just so ya know I'm not a very good writer but I love reading others stories

This is your first fic? This is great! I am impressed. It's very good. You write well, and you managed to keep both Grimmjow and Ulquiorra in character. Well done. Keep up the good work.

The only thing I could think while reading the lemon was, "Grimmjow never closed the door behind him..."

Omg! I loved it! And thats your first story? Woah!

Wow this was your first fanfic? Awesome job! :D I love the pairing! Looking forward to reading more of your work _

whoa. you did good for your first time. and the small fight over grimmy was cute

For a first this is very good Besides from some grammar mistakes (LOL wood, instead of would XD) though, but the overall is good :)

I do have to say that they're OOC though, but that's hard for everyone, since no one except Kubo owns them :) But Ulquiorra is more OOC than necessary (especially in the lemon part). That is, except if you intended to make him OOC/made him situationally OOC. But slightly less could be an option :) (not trying to sound mean here... (: )

I'm not a professional myself though, just giving some hints from experience x)

Continue improving I'd like to read more from you :)

Wow. Is that really your first fic?

I'm guessing that you proofread the story for spelling errors, but not your ANs... That's ok though, lots of writers only write the ANs when they post a story, not when they write it. My sister sometimes forgets to check her ANs when she proofs too.

I'm rambling... But the story is excellent, just remember to proofread the ANs or they don't match the story and it ends up looking like two different people wrote it. (aka: it looks like you are taking credit for smeone else's story)

Don't worry too much though, just try not to type your ANs too fast if you don't want those life-altering typos.

If you remember to proof your ANs, then I can't find anything bad in your story... A tiny bit of grammer trouble, but, overall nothing unforgivable for a first-timer.

I look forward to more stories from you in the future.

And don't listen to the people who down your stuff witout giving you ideas on how to improve, they don't have lives and just get their kicks from ruining good talent like yours. Only pay attention to the people who matter: Fans, and those giving you tips to improve!

Your talent must thrive! I am already a fan of yours.

Wow! That was hot :D

And absolutely wonderful! *0* The fangirl inside of me is really happy

Can't wait to read more of your fics

xoxo

I like it - although you A/Ns have spelling errors in them... 'Would', not 'wood', although considering the topic the spelling you've got could be rather... appropriate. ;)

i like it a lot