its was sooo good...i want to be fucked badly now

Awh, damn that is both sexy as shit. And sweet.

You should add more but also improve on your grammer

This was too much! little freaky selves lol. It was very descriptive... I dont know what to say... Lol

This was sexy, but the main thing that made it so much less enjoyable for me was the "i", being like that the whole way through when you need a capital letter for I. And the fact that the whole speech, with your punctuation and capital letters was really bad. You also can't spell massage. I really hope you don't feel like I'm picking your story apart as I'm not and I'd enjoy to actual see it extended because it's good, it's just the little details which get me. I'd be happy to look over anything for you before it went to posting if you needed somebody and feel free to PM me about this but if you can work on the little details this would be fantastic, I'm not saying it should be perfect as I'm not, and never will be, but it just looks like you lost the will to make effort. Thanks for the journey!

Livy!

*wow* :D I love it.

Awspme love the story! XD

God lol I loved this chap

luv ash

So this means you're continuing your story? If so, you'll want to change the status from 'complete' to 'in progress'.

WOW! That was so HOT!

I like it but there shud b less sex nd more story

Sexxi Bexxie xx

damn you really know how to make a girl wet, i have to take a cold shower.

Need I say more?

nice love the chapter

Please continue it. It's so hot! I loved it, and dominant Alice is so sexy. (Maybe you can continue right onto a second orgasm for Bella there, get her riled up.)