Wonderful!
Update immediately, please!

Oh my GOD I fricking love this fanfic!
Its so cool and awesome and menacing and dark and kid is just so so.. Arugh! I can't Think of the bloody word!
AND the last part of this chapter... fuck. my. LIFE I was literally on the edge of my seat and we've stopped at cliff hanging battle cry/howl/roar thing and and and! I NEED more! Please?

What an awesome story! Hope a new chapter comes out soon!

omg so asowme soo coooll

O_o dammit! Kidd still needs to face the threat and- please I beg that it'll be Doflamingo looolz! just to be a COMPLETE pain in the ass jerk- more than what he habitually do :P ... ... ...

anyway.

I hope kidd and Mura-chan have their 'reeeeal intimate' moment soon... or more like reunited battle against the threat and I dunno ... a tactic combo battle that make them unvunerable!

Whew... I LOVED this chapter.

Wowwwwwww. That has to be some strong presence to make HER go psycho. Note to self, if crazy strong person is out of her mind in fear, be worried. Very very worried.

Your wish is granted I will be reading and reviewing your story for some time to come. Anyways, out of the formalities.

Nice job so far (I have only read up to Chapter 3 so I don't have much to go on). The interesting thing is a bio-weapon that uses weapons. Normally when I hear bio-weapon I think of the human becoming the weapon.

I'd like to see what both Kidd and Blackthorn have planned.

i really love this story, alot...and i hate to admit it...but im jealous of burakkuson .

I'm a slacker when it comes to reviewing, so don't mind my sudden disappearance or presence. XD

Anyway... I'll go with critiques first, and then the praising part.

The first thing that jumped out to me about these few chapters is how you constantly start your sentences with "She." For example:

"SHE grinned, leaning against the wall outside of his bedroom door. SHE listened to him swear as he realized she had gotten away. SHE pushed off the wall, swaggering up the steps with a smirk on her face. Take that, control freak extraordinaire! In the end, I escaped. How is that pride now? SHE swaggered all the way up the stairs until she got to the door that led out onto the upper deck. SHE paused, and pulled it open very slowly. SHE slithered out, trying to be small and inconspicuous. SHE muttered as she slid through the shadows, "Don't mind me, I'm just passing through, don't mind me…""

You have eleven sentences in that paragraph, and seven of them start with the same pronoun with the other four being the character's own thoughts/dialogues- which is NOT part of the narrator's voice. There's nothing grammatically wrong with that, but it does wear down the quality of one's writing when the pattern keeps on being same subject then verb, same subject then verb, etc. You CAN use this kind of repetition for emphasis, of course, but I don't see anything to emphasize there... I would suggest using subordinate clauses at the beginning or maybe use a different subject to spice it up more.

The one other part I have to say isn't something that you did, but something that I hope you wouldn't do. What I'm talking about is how you constantly goes on about how powerful physically and mentally Burakkuson is (the words "physically" and "mentally" IS used a little too much, but I'll leave it at that since I can't find a better way to express it either). It's been a long time since I read the original; I forgot how much her power came into play. However, I'm going to be expecting some major plot points plotted around her powers other than just the barks about it. There is nothing more irritating than giving an OC all that strength and not use it as well, especially when the author makes it sound this fascinating.

On a more upbeat side, you made the falling in love part a lot more clearer this time. I have a better grasp at the chemistry between them, and appreciate that you're not make it a nonsensical, sudden thing.

I also like how she criticized Kidd for his wrongdoings- it shows that she's a good person, and the contrast between their characters make their relationship more appealing.

You also kept her "ancient and mature" personality really well. She doesn't sound as teenager-like as the previous version.

Your paragraphs are also a lot easier on the eyes, so kudos for that!

This last part isn't toward to story, but rather to you; I'm glad that authors like you, who accepts, knows, and acknowledges the point of a reader's criticism, exist. I've tried nicely to point out other writers to their flaws before, and the moment I start on the bad points, they... well... I think you know what happens.

You're doing a great job so far! Keep it up! :D

(Phew, probably the longest review that I've written in a long time!)

wow, Im really amazed by your fanfic! I hope youll upload a new chapter soon! :D

:O OMG! PLZ WRITE MORE AND SoOON :O :)

when r u going 2 update this exiting story?

he bit her?

*Bows down in respect for your awesomeness* Omg that was just brilliant!