I am very disappointed with what you have done, I liked the fact that Naruto was the new kyuubi and then you remove that from him. I like the style of writing that you use but because I don't like what you have done I won't be continuing this story beyond this point

hope you update this story as i really like it

Your story is one big contradiction. First you say that most of Akatsuki is dead and pains connection to the gedo mazo is severed but then they show up and take the nine tails power from Naruto. Make up your mind Akatsuki is either gone or it isn't choose one! This story needs to be rewritten you can't gave Naruto basically become the kyuubi only to have that power taken from him only to become something that is a cross between a ghoul and a vampire it just doesn't fit. It needs to be rewritten so it makes sense!

You should have gotten rid of Akatsuki thats the only part of this story that sucks ass!

So far my only complaint is your portrayal of the civilian council. The village is a military dictatorship not a democracy, the civilian council has no authority over shinobi matters what so ever, so them getting Naruto banished should never have come into play otherwise whats the point in having a hokage.

damnit. i hoped to read more chapter.

Jeez, another one canon rehash and you even made Naruto pathetic weakling because Merlin forbid you to diverge from canon. Why would you want to write this trash is beyond me. As if we don't already have a lot of such crap-stories 99.9% similar to each one.

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hey I get it and I actually love your story I think its amazing and others might not think so but you have people in your corner even if they don't comment

Great story I really liked it a shame that it looks like you gave up on the story.

Please update

Yea, completely off.
How can others get into another dimension?
Why would they be allowed to?
Why would others be after Naruto when there are Bijuu loose?
Why would Naruto even need the Hiraishin? Seriously, he's a kyuubi. His base speed is a jounin, but with the kyuubi chakra, it should be so much faster, seeing as raw chakra can enhance this, and he now holds the entirety of Kyuubi's chakra. Seriously, he should practically be godmode, with only those at the top capable of doing anything. Even if Naruto wasn't capable of beating Gin outright, it should be easy to catch his leg, or something, and put Gin into a position to get beaten down. Kuyou was supposed to be stronger than Gin, and he's not nearly as powerful as what Naruto should be.

Naruto here is just...pathetic, compared to what a Kyuubi should be. Even if just raw power without finesse.

I really don't see the point of chapter 5.
You are introducing characters from the manga that have no point of reference or even a true reason for being there. Even the fact that the village could even get someone there in the first place seems off.

And you have Naruto acting like a genin again. He absorbs the Kyuubi's power, yet can get hurt by brooms and pans? He should have enough Youki coursing through him naturally that it would require more than a little force to hurt him. His natural strength should have multiplied several fold, kind of like when he gets covered in the fox shroud, just without the need for a shroud, since it's a part of him now.

There's just so many little things that are wrong, out of place, or just contradictory, without the slightest explanation why.

Despite all this, your story isn't that bad, and well written. Just... off.

cooooll

come on naruto don't be such a pussy! I mean compared to the type of shit you go through monsters are nothing.