I Love, I Like, I Lust!Please Update Soon!

I like it a lot so far, but it seems like you use phrases like "as of yet" and "was to be found" that sound odd. I'm not sure how to explain it - you just don't hear people using those phrases when they talk (at least where I'm from), so it looks odd to read them. I noticed a few terms/words that were overly used. "However" is used quite a bit in the first part of the story.

I also think that the idea of 'the oc sits with Remus, Harry, Ron and Hermione on the train to Hogwarts' is a little overly done, but I won't complain since I really like the story so far.

I do have a bit of advice, though, when you are introducing and describing a new character. In the beginning, you break off from your usual style and sentence-structures to basically list things off. You go from talking casually, where we learn what is happening at a good pace, to everything about this girls appearance being packed into this once paragraph. It seems a little expositional and clunky, but even I do that a lot myself - I think we all do. (It's just something to keep in mind when introducing new characters.) - Also, in the description paragraph, I noticed that you threw in a huge word (physiognomy). You generally want to keep your vocabulary at the same 'level' throughout your writing, and while some big words just can't be substituted, I think that most of them can.

Anyway, I don't want you to think that I don't like the story - I only give a lot of constructive criticism to stories that I want to continue reading. :)

aww remus:) glad you updated!

DUN DUN DUNNNNNN! O-O

I love this story!

Pleae update it soon!

AH MY GOD! Keep writing! Im loving it!

great chapter,keep up the good work! i hope you update soon:)

this seems VERY interesting! i really wanna see where this goes:) off to the next chappies!

Really cool update soon though the chap was a bit sad I still love it

luv the story! XD

Update soon, please!

This is an amazing story! :) xx

You're doing pretty well so far, keep up the good work!

so far, amazing story. i love remus!

He needs to find her! Oh my goodness! Please dont keep us waiting very long! Its just getting to the good parts, I bet. I really like this story, Lin is a fascinating character.

this is great. please update soon.