It's been so long. Please come back and complete this?

Need to finish this story! Gosh! Kinda left hanging with keely kidnapped and Phil in search of his love! Come on man! Lol

You've salvaged Phil Diffy with this chapter in my eyes, and Keely's if she learns of it somehow. Yes, Phil convinced himself to disobey Keely's wishes from her diary and instead interfere with how her life turns out without him, but isn't he acting a little selfish, too? Keely is aware of it, keeping him at arm's length. He had a time machine after all. He could have come back earlier, even come back several times to keep their relationship alive, but no. Phil comes back to rescue Keely from her own bad judgement, forever thinking he knows better. Phil hasn't come off more mature with Ted, either, and all three of them know this. Yes, if not a jerk, P. Diffy has come across as selfish with a side order of an air of superiority.

Then you saved him. We see him as his parents see him, as someone well meaning, but still in need of assistance to come up with the right answer. He needs his parents confidence in him and his father has that in spades. Lloyd shines in this chapter not doubt, but the tear jerker ending, along with the explanation as to why the time machine is when it isn't supposed to be really bring everything home.

The only problem with this chapter is that it's got me thinking - hey, wipe that smirk off your face! No, I mean it. What if something terrible happens to Phil because of his attempt to rescue Keely and THAT is why she wrote Phil not to change her future - which we've been told wasn't\isn't as rosy as she jotted down? Usually when an author has me guessing like this, I look to the title for a clue, but this could be read either way: an innocent title or something more ominous. Guess I'll just have to grit my teeth, hug my teddy bear and see what happens next. Good work!

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Great work capturing Mandy Teslow, Michaela. Both the character we know and her present state as a mother experiencing a waking nightmare, one which has taken a left turn into the twilight zone. Choked, shrieked, whispered, cried: your portrayal of her as highly stressed, but keeping things together to help her daughter is strong. Great symmetry also: Mrs. T loses her daughter and Phil will lose\has lost his father, and Phil dealing with a grieving mother for the first-second time in his life.

"…what could happen to Keely by then?" - Has Keely's mother never seen back to the future? Three-dimensional thinking, Mrs. T. and it seems to be contagious as Phil didn't correct her. Of course the trick is not to run off in time to rescue Keely, but to use the time machine to stop Ted from taking Keely in the first place. Yeah, yeah, I know. Then there's the whole action and reaction paradox of "if she isn't kidnapped, then Phil would never go back in time to stop Ted. While that made perfect sense in the Time Machine movie remake, it doesn't' apply to the Christmas Break episode, so BL-L-L-T-TT to that!

If Phil can get the wonky time crate going again, and if Keely is rescued, there's no guaranteed that Keely's going to give him any brownie points for his effort. Having her mother along couldn't hurt though, and if the rescue somehow results (maybe due to Phil's meeting with his father next chapter (okay, I peeked once more - it's sort of like time traveling!) or Lloyd just parks his time machine on Ted's head*) in Phil's dad also going cardiac problems free, well, I like a happy ending, don't you? Of course, that's a lot of "ifs."

"… he began pressing the doorbell repeating …" - repeatedly
"And she didn't want him to through (THROW) his youth away trying to take care of family that wasn't his responsibility. - If the family that raised Phil isn't his to be responsible for, then that's dumb future in store for us all.
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* Admittedly, I don't know how such vehicle parking would positioning can affect cardiac muscle, but it does cause me to smile. You've crafted Ted into an antagonist with some depth, enough so that it brings out nasty wishes on my part. Go Pheely!

Welcome back, Michaela! A triple chaptered return - nice! Ted-Keely-Phil: this certainly isn't turning out to be a traditional love triangle, but one in which Keely is the sincere one and the lads are shooting death rays from their eyeballs. Sure, Keely is the vertex for a couple of rays smitten with her; however, this Disney princess isn't interested in being competed for as anyone's prize. Nicely done. The suitors don't seem able to really stop though. They just cool it around Keely as she sets the boundaries of her relationships with them. This is one lady who's not going to be pressured into a decision. (I kind of miss the old Teslow spontaneity though.)

So you had Ted suggest ice cream, Michaela? Were you subtly having everyone cool off after the opening scene? Well, it worked, and without going into details regarding their frozen concoctions thank you very much. It was enough to read that Phil had to suffer through the syrup and sprinkles.
I didn't mind the cancellation of the news - maybe they'll rerun an episode of Phil of the Future? Kidnapping though? If I was jealous Phil, the first thing that would have run through my thoughts might have been that Ted and Keely had run off to Las Vegas to get hitched, then that Ted had killed her, and finally the kidnapping thingy. Now, you have a story to tell and you know where you're headed, but that doesn't make Phil knowing what's up as a given. The drama rose when you had him taking a walk when he admitted to Keely's mom that he didn't have all the answers (or even a clue) about what to do next after his own time machine went on the fritz. (Okay, I peeked.)

Best part? Well, the two additional chapter I get to read next, certainly!

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Awwww!,

Santa came early this year! Thank you for this latest installment, and before Christmas, too, Mickee A. Renn. That admission aside, this was a better day for us than poor Phil. Dating's stressful enough without being stalked from the future - wait, isn't that what Diffy's doing, stalking Keely? She did, after all, give future boy the heave-ho when she directed him to stay out of her life; a direction which he's ignored. Okay, okay, so he's doing it for her own good. Yeah, right; try telling that the time police when they come to arrest you, Philly-Willey. But, back to your date …

… I really liked the foreshadowing with the waiter's cell because the observation of the phone's use was that it was mundane and below the radar of the readers. Phil's suspicious interpretation of its use would have seemed a bit paranoid, becoming more so by his testing their waiter, but the part that I really liked was that you made it make sense, this ordinary action was a viable threat to Phil's efforts to win back Keely Teslow. ("Undertaker"? Loved it. Honesty in advertising in the future, just like Death cigarettes.)

So, "Even If You Hate ME" for now, Phil considers the big picture and is determined to protect Keely. Not such a bad old boyfriend after all, even if Keely can't see that right now. As for you, thank you for noticing that we would appreciate your update, M.A.R.

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ouuuuu cant wait update soon

Please Update! I love this story!

Please update!

Yes, your choice for a closing quote was haunting me throughout the chapter already. Not your typical chapter, Mickee A. Renn. With your new nom de plume you have brought along a richer emotional rendering in this tale. You had me agreeing with Phil that this was all a bad idea and he should head back to the future and forget about what's-her-name, then the testosterone level kept rising with Ted influence. Of course we know why Phil's apt to be jealous, but you'd think a world class reporter to be would buy a vowel at least, if not a clue.

A short chapter, and very clean. You could have gone on too long with any portion, but this was tight and well edited. Best of all, you surprised me at the end of the chapter with something I had long abandoned for Phil and Keely. Hope.

Thank you for returning to this tale. Very few authors attempt to resubmit revised versions of their stories and it's heartwarming to finally see one truly blossom into something greater, both the story and its author.

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Great chapter! I can't wait for more!

Phil appears adrift in this chapter about news anchors, which is entirely apropos as he isn't his sister and is winging it. Always, always, have a plan, Phil! Opportunity presented itself when you unwittingly pulled a Goldilocks on him and you still said diddly to Ted. Silent Mystery, on the other hand, did fine work describing the scene, portraying Mr. Diffy just as alone in this century as the next one, and reminding me of the first chapter's stroll and parking lot scene.

Great vocabulary. Bustling. Loved it - not as much as Keely's performance. Now that, that was hilarious. We know Keely's dream is to be an investigative reporter, but "come on!" Viewers would be glued to their screens to watch her hilarity. What a way to start the morning! Great job writing her stumbled ramble - not as easy to pull off as one might think.

Enjoyable flashbacks - not all yours, some mine - of the first two seasons of Phil of the Future (Okay, okay, there were only two.) which supported the chapter's ending with Keely rising above adversity with some unselfish support from Phil.

Still, there's Ted ...

Phil, maybe a plan isn't what you need; it's placing Keely's happiness first, unselfishly, and allowing her to decide? Looking forward to finding out, or maybe I'm not. I want a happy ending. You've definitely injected tension into your story. Great chapter, Silent Mystery!

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NIce update and great insight on Keely's first day on the job. :D

It was intersting of Phil to remind Keely of the Talent show episode where she gains her own self-confidence, as a way to cheer her up. :D

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great story. ;)

I haven't read POTF fics in a long time, but this was awesome. I hope to see you update soon!